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Todays, there is a widespread belief that people can to access any information which is online for free, so that printed edition can be replaced by that way. I find myself in complete disagreement with this opinion.

Beside many advantages, such as convenient, mobility, environmentally friendly and so on, there are a lot of drawbacks in terms of reading book on electronic devices. Frist, several health issues could occur due to the overuse of e-books in long time. In other word, many people, especial children, keep their eyes glued to screens. That is main cause of short sightedness and other eye problems like dry eye, eyestrain and so on. Moreover, using electronic devices could be hurmful to mental health for example autism, depression, that is suggested by numerous reaches of medical experts. Second, it is difficult to focus on content of books when people use electronic devices because you could neglect you task by surfing the website or messing with frends.

In addition, traditional printed books and magazines have a plenty of reasons for exist in the digital world. Providing that, there were not printed edition, some people in old generation or in poor condition who can not access to modern divices, are not able to opportunity for knowledge. Furthermore, a lot of people like the feeling of wholing the physical books, so that it is more motivations to complete a book or it can be a value gift.

In conclusion, although digital versions of books and magazines are many advantages, there are a lot of disadvantages and traditional printed edition is some unique traits which can be supereded.

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Todays, (wrong word) there is a widespread belief that people can to access any information which is online for free, so that printed form edition can be replaced by that way. (That is not a good paraphrase. It is obvious that people can access free online information for free. But that is not the question. It is about a future situation, not the present. You will lose points for not answering the essay topic exactly.) I find myself in complete disagreement with this opinion.

Beside many advantages, such as convenient, (wrong word) mobility, (wrong word) and being environmentally friendly and so on, (Do not use ellipses, "etc." or phrases such as "and so on" in formal essays.) there are a lot of drawbacks in terms of reading book (wrong form) on electronic devices. Frist, several health issues could occur due to the overuse (wrong word) of e-books in long time. (wrong expression) In other word, (wrong form) many people, especial (wrong word) children, keep their eyes glued to screens. (not a good expression. It is informal) That is main cause of shortsightedness and other eye problems like dry eye, eyestrain and so on. (Do not use ellipses, "etc." or phrases such as "and so on" in formal essays.) Moreover, using electronic devices could be hurmful to mental health for example autism, (wrong word) depression, that as is suggested by numerous reaches (wrong word) of medical experts. Second, it is difficult to focus on content of books when people use electronic devices because you (wrong pronoun) could neglect you (wrong word) task by surfing the website (wrong word) or messing (wrong word) with frends.

In addition, traditional printed books and magazines have a plenty of (wrong expression) many reasons for (wrong word) exist in the digital world. Providing that, (wrong expression) If there were no printed form edition, some older people in old generation or in poor condition who can not access to do not own one of these modern divices, are not able to opportunity for knowledge. (wrong expression) Furthermore, a lot of people like the feeling of wholing (wrong word) the physical books, so that it is more motivations (wrong form) to complete a book or it can be a value (wrong word) gift.

In conclusion, although digital versions of books and magazines are (wrong word) many advantages, there are a lot of disadvantages and traditional printed edition is (wrong word) some unique traits which can be supereded.


You did not answer the essay topic. It is talking about the future, not what happens today. This is not an "advantages/disadvantages" essay. It is an opinion essay. Do not mix the different essay types. The conclusion is appropriate for an "advantages/disadvantages" essay. You need to repeat your opinion and summarize your main points.

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Topic: : In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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