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As we know, a large number of people currently have tendency to moving from the countrysides to cities where everything is more state-of-the-art. This essay will discuss about the benefits and drawbacks of living in a small settlement.
On the bright side, people can get on well with neighbors in the village so they also learn social skills. For instance, children always have chance to play or experience with others. By means of chatting and sharing, they never feel lonely. What's more, the living costs are cheaper than that in the city. Almost all of goods are reasonable price which helps villagers live on an easier conditions. Another main reason is people won't need to worried about some alarming problems like traffic congestion, exhaust fumes, polluted environment because of so few cars there. It's why the countryside has nearly zero emissions. This make sure about health for inhabitants.
However, settle down in small community isn't completely beneficial, there're some negative aspects that should be taken into consideration. Firstly, the facilities and infrastructures in the countryside are not as good as in the city. Many schools, buildings, hospitals, workplaces are invested to provide the best thing for humans. People can have better chance in educationand care-taking. Secondly, young people must face up to the absence of jobs. The percentage of unemployments have been rising because there isn't enough office to do. Then they will have difficulty in developing economic or enhance living's quality.
From my perspective, the advantages of living in small community is greater than the disadvantages.Peple perchance have less money but they can live in peace, quiet and harmony. Especially, they will always be surrounded by their neighborhoods who will lend a hand to them under any circumstances.

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As we know, a large number of people currently have the tendency to moving (wrong form - move) from the countrysides (wrong form. countryside is non-count) to cities where everything is more modern. state-of-the-art. This essay will discuss about the benefits and drawbacks of living in a small settlement.

It is bad form to mention your essay in an academic essay. Do not announce to the reader what you are going to say. Instead, write a thesis statement. The thesis statement is the most important sentence in your essay. It states your main point, or it answers the prompt.

Here is an example thesis statement for this essay.

Although the modern urban lifestyle was dynamic, exciting and enticing and afforded many opportunities, it often had negative consequences that could have been avoided by remaining in the village and living a quiet life there. 

It tickles the reader's imaginations about what you are going to write in your body paragraphs. This is much better than "this essay will discuss X and Y." If you write a good thesis statement, it will impress the examiner. Practice writing thesis statements.


On the bright side, Living in a town or village, people can get on well with neighbors in the village so they also learn social skills. For instance, children always have chance to play or experience with others. By means of chatting and sharing, they never feel lonely. What's is (Avoid contractions in academic essays.) more, the living costs are cheaper than that in the city. Almost all of the goods can be purchased at a are reasonable price which helps villagers live well without financial problems. on an easier conditions. Another main benefit reason is people won't do not need to worried (wrong form) about some alarming problems like traffic congestion, exhaust fumes, and a polluted environment because of so few cars there. It's why the countryside has fresh and clean air to breathe. nearly zero emissions. This make sure about health makes a village a healthier place to live for inhabitants.
However, settle (wrong form ) down in small community isn't completely beneficial, (comma splice error - wrong punctuation, ungrammatical) there're some negative aspects that should be taken into consideration. Firstly, First, the facilities and infrastructures (wrong form) in the countryside are not as good as in the city. Many schools, buildings, hospitals, and workplaces are invested to provide the best thing for humans. (I do not understand. Do you mean that there is more investment in schools.... so they are of a higher quality?) People can have better chance in educationand care-taking. Secondly, Second, young people must face up to the lack absence of jobs. The percentage of unemployments (wrong form - move) have (wrong form) been rising because there isn't enough office (wrong word) to do. Then they will have difficulty in developing economic (wrong expression. This makes no sense.) or enhance living's quality. (wrong expression. This makes no sense.)
From my perspective, the advantages of living in small community is greater than the disadvantages.Peple (Punctuation, spelling. Also the topic did not ask you to give an opinion, did it? The topic asked you to write about conditions at a time in the past, not about the present day. So you did not follow the essay instructions exactly. That may lower your score.) perchance have less money but they can live in peace, quiet and harmony. Especially, they will always be surrounded by their neighborhoods (wrong word.) who will lend them a hand to them under any circumstances.