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These days, people are living mostly in such large urban areas that they only know few people nearby. However, years ago, people used to inhabit smaller areas which has both pros and cons that will be discussed in this essay.

On the one hand, people can benefit a lot from living in a small community. Firstly, people can make friends and know each other easily and quickly. They can visit each other's house on a regular basis and have a close talk which facilitates their relationships. For example, people in some villages often gather in someone's house at the weekend where they cook and have a small meal which creates a united and cozy atmosphere and builds up inside themselves a sense of attachment. Secondly, people living nearby can help and share with each other in many cases. For example, they can help take care of the children in the village when their parents are at work so that they do not need to be worried. Thirdly, children growing up in a small community can learn social skills from an early age. They often play with and take care of each other, thus becoming more responsible. Some oldren children may also help do the housework and teach the kids as well.

On the other hand, there are some worrisome problems regarding these areas may be short of many vital services such as education system and healthcare. To get these services, villages often have to go a very long distance to the centre areas which may cause inconvenience and danger to themselves. Secondly, there are not many job opportunities for people in the village that lead to high rate of unemployment, entailing a shortage of money to meet their basic needs. For example, in some rural areas, people have to live on a contaminated source of water and children are even starving for food which can cause several serious disease.

To sum up, I can say in affirmative that living in narrow areas can be both beneficial and harmful. There should be some actions to be taken to help develop and equip these areas with better facilities so that their inhabitants can enjoy a more secured life.

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These days, people are living mostly in such large urban areas that they only know only a few people nearby. However, years ago, people used to inhabit smaller villages and towns. There were advantages such as a spirit of community, friendships and helping each other, but also problems such as lack of career opportunities. areas which has both pros and cons that will be discussed in this essay.

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On the one hand, people can benefit a lot from living in a small community. Firstly, First, people can make friends and know each other easily and quickly. They can visit each other's houses on a regular basis and have a close talk which strengthens facilitates their relationships. For example, people in some villages often gather in someone's house at the weekend where they cook and have a small meal which creates a united and cozy atmosphere and builds up inside themselves a sense of attachment. Secondly, Second, people living nearby can help and share things with each other in many cases. For example, they can help take care of the children in the village when their parents are at work so that they do not need to be worried. Thirdly, Third, children growing up in a small community can learn social skills from an early age. They often play with and take care of each other, thus becoming more responsible. Some oldren children Teenagers may also help do the housework and teach the younger children kids as well.

On the other hand, there are some worrisome problems. regarding these areas may be short of many vital services (Ungrammatical - You cannot use a main clause after a preposition.) Small towns lack services such as a good education system and healthcare. To get these services, villagers often have to go a very long distance to the larger cities centre areas which may cause inconvenience and danger to themselves. Secondly, Second, there are not many job opportunities for people in the a village. And that can lead to high rate of unemployment and poverty where they do not have enough entailing a shortage of money to meet their basic needs. For example, in some rural areas, people have to live on a contaminated sources of drinking water and children are even starving and malnourished. for food which can cause several serious disease.

To sum up, I can affirm say in affirmative that living in a village narrow areas can be both beneficial and harmful. (If the essay instructions did not ask you for a solution, do not give one. Focus only on the task you were given. Also, the task is comparing the past to the present. But you did not use the past tense to describe the advantages and disadvantages of small town living. So you will lose some points for not being precisely on the task..) There should be some actions to be taken to help develop and equip these areas with better facilities so that their inhabitants can enjoy a more secured life.

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