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Some decades ago, people would categorize shopping as household chores. Nowadays, however, this activity plays a role of a hobby. In my opinion, this trend is rather positive.
First of all, people can increase the economy of their region while shopping. This is because they accelerate the turnover of merchandise, which enriches manufacturers and store owners. Simultaneously, these businessmen contribute to the exchequer and authorities can use these monetary resources to ameliorate social facilities. For instance, our government finances projects dedicated to constructing parks and roads. Therefore, the more products are purchased, the more developed the region can become.
Secondly, certain people tend to receive personal fulfillment from this time passing. This means that shopping can serve as entertainment, by doing which not only do people enjoy the time, but they can also cheer up themselves. A simple example can be my sister, whose longing for shopping always makes her happy when it comes to it.
Finally, shopping may help to reduces stress exposure. These days, the majority suffer from stress-related issues caused by different factors such as traffic congestion. For example, it is commonplace for my family to decompress by visiting stores once in a week.

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Some decades ago, people would categorize shopping as a household chores. Nowadays, however, this activity plays a role of a hobby. In my opinion, this trend is rather positive. (Why?)


First of all, people can increase the economy of their region while shopping. This is because they accelerate the turnover of merchandise, which enriches manufacturers and store owners. Simultaneously, these businessmen contribute to the exchequer and authorities can use these monetary resources to build more infrastructure and public facilities. ameliorate social facilities. For instance, our government finances projects dedicated to constructing parks and roads. Therefore, the more products are purchased, the more developed the region can become.


Secondly, certain people tend to receive personal fulfillment from going to shops, looking at the latest styles and trends, and trying on some new clothes. this time passing. This means that shopping can serve as entertainment, so by doing which not only do people enjoy the time, but they can also cheer up themselves up. A simple example can be my sister, whose longing for shopping always makes her happy when it comes to it.
Finally, shopping may help to reduces (wrong form) stress exposure. These days, the majority suffer from stress-related issues caused by different factors such as traffic congestion. For example, it is commonplace for my family to decompress by visiting stores once in a week.