I had to write an essay of not longer than 200 and 250 words. Can someone please give me a feedback and an overall mark if possible. The composition carries 50 marks in total. Thank you very much.

Your pen friend from is coming to stay with you and your family for three weeks in August. Write a letter to him/her giving advice about any arrangements he/she needs to make before coming to , what he/she needs to bring with him/her, and finally your own plans for the holiday stay.

24, ‘Our Nest’

,

Mosta MST 06

1st May 2007

Dear Mark,

Thank you for your last letter. I am very happy that you had decided to come to for your holiday. Even my family are, my mum is already preparing your bed and your place to stay.

As you are coming in August, it is better to book your ticket to be safe. You do not have to worry what to bring with you, is very hot in August so bring very light clothes. So not forget your swim suit and sun block, the sun in Malts is very dangerous especially for people like you.

I am planning ‘our’ holiday to make it more interesting. We have a lot of things to do like sightseeing, barbecues and of course swimming. I am looking for some interesting places to go for sightseeing, which will be very helpful for your University course about history. More over we can go to some feasts, to see the Maltese culture. I am sure it will be fun.

I have to go now. I hope I was a help for you, and to hear from you again. I will send you an other letter before you come. Say hello to your family and tell your sister good luck for her exams.

Your friend,

David

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AnonymousI had to write an essay of not longer than 200 and 250 words. Can someone please give me a feedback and an overall mark if possible. The composition carries 50 marks in total. Thank you very much.

Your pen friend from is coming to stay with you and your family for three weeks in August. Write a letter to him/her giving advice about any arrangements he/she needs to make before coming to , what he/she needs to bring with him/her, and finally your own plans for the holiday stay.

24, ‘Our Nest’

,

Mosta MST 06

1st May 2007

Dear Mark,

Thank you for your last letter. I am very happy that you had [have] decided to come to for your holiday. Even my family are, my mum is already preparing your bed and your place to stay.

As you are coming in August, it is better to book your ticket to be safe. You do not have to worry what to bring with you. is very hot in August so bring very light clothes. Also not forget your swim suit and sun block as the sun in Malts is very dangerous, especially for people like you .

I am planning ‘our’ holiday to make it more interesting. We have a lot of things to do like sightseeing, barbecues and of course swimming. I am looking for some interesting places to go for sightseeing, which will be very helpful for your University course about history. Moreover, we can go to some feasts, to see the Maltese culture. I am sure it will be fun.

I have to go now. I hope I was a help for you, and look forward to hearing from you again. I will send you another letter before you come. Say hello to your family and tell your sister good luck for her exams.

Your friend,

David

8 May 2003

Dear Jessica,

Thank you for your interesting letter. I also enjoyed the four weeks we spent together in Australia. All my other friends are so jealous when I show them the pictures. I’ll never forget those days, especially our fascinating trip to Ayers Rock. I wish I could be there now.

Back at university, it seems as if again nothing has changed: because the rooms are too small, the lecturers only allow students who are at least in their fourth semester to attend the courses. So I (third semester) have been kicked out of six courses so far. I really hate not to get into a seminar which interests me. Am I supposed to attend only those seminars nobody gives a damn about? Or should I give in and study several terms longer? I don’t feel like doing either. Even if you stand in line for hours and finally make it into a course, the room usually is jam-packed. This circumstance eventually leads to a lower quality of the course. We won’t be as qualified as we should be!

There aren’t enough rooms either. No wonder, if you think of the fact that the university in was constructed for about 1,600 students and there are actually as many as 4,800 students. The problems have been the same every semester since we moved to the new campus. I’m so fed up with this situation. It really sucks!

One reason for this disaster is money, as always. Why isn’t there enough money? What do they do with all the money? Isn’t education one of the most important things in life? If the people in charge don’t know how to spend the money correctly, they should ask us. For example, they had to have this stupid, ridiculous and unnecessary fountain. This silly thing even works when it’s raining. Instead they could have built another floor.

By the way, you’ve just started college. Do you have the same problems in ? If you don’t, you’re especially lucky. I mean, I hope that you don’t have to experience all these bloody things but the situation can’t be so much better in , can it? I’m truly sorry to bother you with all this stuff but I think that you can understand the way I’m feeling at the moment.

Maybe we could meet during our week off at Whitsun. It would be great to see you again and just get out of this. Please call or write back a.s.a.p.!

Love,
Andrea
P.S. I’m going to write a letter to the head honcho… or whatever he’s called, right now!!
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dear shammah

I really do appreciate the fact that I will be coming over to your home for the holidays and for that you said you will welcome me with wide open hands. I will push the bus driver to get me quickly there.

This means a lot to me because I will not be sitting at home doing nothing. From what you said I shall bring, evreything you listed is there and I cannot wait until I come. I have already started counting weeks but the sooner the better I will be there. Even though I am coming after our trip I will still get there. You just hold on and you will see me by your doorstep

Pass my greeting to your family. Mostly to the two small angels baby Natalie and baby Caleb.

Your friend
Carol
dear shammah
I really do appreciate the fact that I will be coming over to your home for the holidays and for that you said that you will welcome me with wide open hands. I will push the bus driver to get me quickly there.
This means a lot to me because I will not be sitting at home doing nothing. From what you said I shall bring, evreything you listed is there and I cannot wait until I come. I have already started counting weeks but the sooner the faster I will be there. Even though I am coming after our trip I will still get there. You just hold on and you will see me by your doorstep.

Pass Convey my greeting to your family. Mostly to the two small angels- baby Natalie and baby Caleb.
Your friend
Carol
AnonymousI had to write an essay of not longer than 200 and 250 words. Can someone please give me a feedback and an overall mark if possible. The composition carries 50 marks in total. Thank you very much.

Your pen friend from is coming to stay with you and your family for three weeks in August. Write a letter to him/her giving advice about any arrangements he/she needs to make before coming to , what he/she needs to bring with him/her, and finally your own plans for the holiday stay.

24, ‘Our Nest’

,

Mosta MST 06

1st May 2007

Dear Mark,

Thank you for your last letter. I am very happy that you had [have] decided to come to for your holiday. Even my family are, my mum is already preparing your bed and your place to stay.

As you are coming in August, it is better to book your ticket to be safe. You do not have to worry what to bring with you. It is very hot in August so bring very light clothes. Also not forget your swim suit and sun block as the sun in Malts is very dangerous, especially for people like you .

I am planning ‘our’ holiday to make it more interesting. We have a lot of things to do like sightseeing, barbecues and of course swimming. I am looking for some interesting places to go for sightseeing, which will be very helpful for your University course about history. Moreover, we can go to some feasts, to see the Maltese culture. I am sure it will be fun.

I have to go now. I hope I was a help for you, and look forward to hearing from you again. I will send you another letter before you come. Say hello to your family and tell your sister good luck for her exams.

Your friend,

David
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shadow beastAnonymousI had to write an essay of not longer than 200 and 250 words. Can someone please give me a feedback and an overall mark if possible. The composition carries 50 marks in total. Thank you very much.Your pen friend from is coming to stay with you and your family for three weeks in August. Write a letter to him/her giving advice about any arrangements he/she needs to make before coming to , what he/she needs to bring with him/her, and finally your own plans for the holiday stay.24, ‘Our Nest’,Mosta MST 061st May 2007 Dear Mark,Thank you for your last letter. I am very happy that you had [have] decided to come to for your holiday. Even my family are, my mum is already preparing your bed and your place to stay.As you are coming in August, it is better to book your ticket to be safe. You do not have to worry what to bring with you. It is very hot in August so bring very light clothes. Also not forget your swim suit and sun block as the sun in Malts is very dangerous, especially for people like you .I am planning ‘our’ holiday to make it more interesting. We have a lot of things to do like sightseeing, barbecues and of course swimming. I am looking for some interesting places to go for sightseeing, which will be very helpful for your University course about history. Moreover, we can go to some feasts, to see the Maltese culture. I am sure it will be fun.I have to go now. I hope I was a help for you, and look forward to hearing from you again. I will send you another letter before you come. Say hello to your family and tell your sister good luck for her exams.Your friend,David
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It's odd because it was copied from another posting that had many errors.
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