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Hi

Would you say this sentence, especially the red part, would look OK in an article? Any suggestions?

She never gave us insight into her mentality why she had so suddenly decided to wrap up her business.

Or this:

She never gave us insight into her thinking why she had so suddenly decided to wrap up her business.

Thanks,

Tom

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Your second version is preferable. The first version could be interpreted as she was crazy or something bad. The second version simply suggests that she didn't tell you why she wrapped up her business. With a little thought, though, you could probably do even better.

Original

She never gave us insight into her thinking why she had so suddenly decided to wrap up her business.

Recast

She never gave us her reasons why she had so suddenly decided to wrap up her business.

Insight into her thinking is wordy. What you really mean is that she didn't tell you why.