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NO doubt that watching TV has become a daily habit for both children and adult. Television is considered as a two sides effect instrument. In fact, watching TV can be very useful for viewers. But we can not deny the truth that it has a lot of bad effects especially on children. That is clearly obvious in the violence scene which are shown on its screen. Television violence affects all who view it, but its biggest effect is on children. Children’s minds are like a blank page. Television is writing violence on that page. Television violence is one of the causes of aggression and violent behavior in children.

Recent researches indicates that young children up to 6 year watch TV in average of 60 hours in a week. Those hours decrease to 6,5 a day when entering a school and so on. Accordingly, children spend more time in watching TV than in schools. As a result of long time of watching, children are exposed to violent scenes .With the regular watching, a child get used to those scenes. This causes him acclimation of the feeling in danger. Moreover, it causes the child to accept the idea that violence is the perfect mean solve problems. There will be no way to negotiate with others. It is only hands which do the job. Additionally, he tries to do whatever he sees on that small screen through imitation. By the pass of the time, this may turn him to be a real criminal .

In the final analysis, we got to the truth that television has a great affects on our children. Mostly, they are bad effects. It even can turn them into criminals or murderers. So that we should pay more attention to what they watch to protect them from its dangers. It is our duty as elder, wise and responsible people.
Television is considered as a two sides effect instrument ---> two-side

In fact, watching TV can be very useful for viewers. But we can not deny the truth that it has a lot of bad effects especially on children. ----> 'In fact' sounds quite weird. You should use 'in fact' only in case you want to make a contrast with the ideas before. In my opinion, the two sentences should be combined as 'Watching TV can be very useful for viewers, but we can not deny the truth that it has a lot of bad effects especially on children.'

That is clearly obvious in the violence scene which are shown on its screen. ---> What do that and its refer to? Clearly obvious is a redundant phrase. Scene should be scenes.

Children's minds are like a blank page ----> Wrong comparison.

Recent researches indicates.

Young children up to 6 year watch TV in average of 60 hours in a week -----> Young children up to 6 (years old) watch TV in average of 60 hours a week.

Those hours decrease to 6,5 a day when entering a school and so on. -----> Because you are writing about 'hours in a week', turning into 'hours in a day' may cause misunderstanding.

A child get

This causes him acclimation of the feeling in danger. -----> ?

Moreover, it causes the child to accept the idea that violence is the perfect mean solve problems. ---> to solve problems or of solving problems.

In the final analysis, we got to the truth that television has a great affects on our children. ----> Tense agreement error.

The last paragraph contains a lot of reference-errors.

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NO doubt that watching TV has become a daily habit for both children and adult. Television is considered as a two sides effect instrument-TRY: There are two sides to television viewing. In fact, watching TV can be very useful for viewers. But we can not deny the truth that it has a lot of bad effects especially on children. That is clearly obvious in the violence scene which are shown on its screen. Television violence affects all who view it, but its biggest effect is on children. Children’s minds are like a blank page. Television is writing violence on that page. Television violence is one of the causes of aggression and violent behavior in children. Not a grammatical comment, but you need to cite a source for this. It is not "clearly obvious" that violence on TV has a bad effect on children unless you cite a study that says so.

Recent researches indicates that young children up to 6 year watch TV in average of 60 hours in a week. Those hours decrease to 6,5 a day when entering a school and so on. Accordingly, children spend more time in watching TV than in schools. Is your school day really less than 6.5 hours? As a result of long time of watching, children are exposed to violent scenes .With the regular watching, a child get used to those scenes. This causes him acclimation of the feeling in danger. Moreover, it causes the child to accept the idea that violence is the perfect mean solve problems.Again you better cite your source. I know a LOT of children who watch a lot of TV, and none of them see violence as the "perfect means" to solve problems. There will be no way to negotiate with others. It is only hands which do the job. Additionally, he tries to do whatever he sees on that small screen through imitation.Neither of my children have ever tired to imitate what they see on TV. By the pass of the time, this may turn him to be a real criminal . This is just a crazy statement to make

In the final analysis There was no analysis here. Just a bunch of scary-sounding rhetoric, we got to the truth that television has a great affects on our children. Mostly, they are bad effects. It even can turn them into criminals or murderers. Presposterous! So that we should pay more attention to what they watch to protect them from its dangers. It is our duty as elder, wise and responsible people.

I'm sorry, but this essay is nuts. I've highlighted in yellow the grammatical or word choice errors, but you need to cite EVIDENCE of the effects of violent scenes on TV on the long-term behavior of children, and not simply STATE that if they watch TV, they become murderers. I'm sorry to sound harsh, and I too would rather see my kids outside building fairy home and tossing the ball around than watching TV, but if they spend a rainy day inside plopped in front of the TV, I have no fear that they will try to murder me in their sleep and assume that fighting is the way to settle any argument. You don't do any "analysis" here at all. If you want to write an essay on the horrors of too much television, then write about it's connection to an overly sedentary lifestyle and childhood obesity, or showing insanely skinny women who give girls body-image issues, but don't say that watching cartoon violence is surely a precursor to a life behind bars!