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Hello, how are you doing? Please I need your help. Am in bad on essay writing and grammar skill. Could you give me essay topic and check my essay? please am going to take TOEFL . thank you so much.
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Hello, hanitoefl-- and welcome to English Forums.

Here is an authentic TOEFL topic:

Some students apply for admission only to their first-choice school, while others apply to several schools. Which plan do you agree with, and why? Be sure to include details and examples to support your opinion.

You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your response. Write 300-350 words.
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peopl believes that the frist choice has a fate. But int this context it is a bit contradiction to say first choise is good. for me i perfer to apply my frist choise of school. i have some reasons to support my points.

Frist of all, everybody have its own frist choice to select to do or to plam something. for me my first choice school would be comfortable to interact with new friends, teachers and environment. I see some students regreted themselves because of their scond or other choices. I believe that frist choise always brings good luck, being interesting and gives more motives to do.

Secondly, by your first choice you would be successful in your acdameic or in your favoirte subject. fro instance, when i was joined my junior secondary school ws my frist choice. when I joined this school I loved my History teacher way of teaching and interacted with us. because of this Histroy was my faviorte subject . what i mean some students apply their frist choice is good.

To sum up, some students apply their frsit choice because they are beleiveing frist choise has bring good luck, feeling happy and considering that the school condition is comfortable for them.

Thank you.
I have underlined some problem areas:

peopl believes that the frist choice has a fate. But int this context it is a bit contradiction to say first choise is good. for me i perfer to apply my frist choise of school. i have some reasons to support my points.

Frist of all, everybody have its own frist choice to select to do or to plam something. for me my first choice school would be comfortable to interact with new friends, teachers and environment. I see some students regreted themselves because of their scond or other choices. I believe that frist choise always brings good luck, being interesting and gives more motives to do.

Secondly, by your first choice you would be successful in your acdameic or in your favoirte subject. fro instance, when i was joined my junior secondary school ws my frist choice. when I joined this school I loved my History teacher way of teaching and interacted with us. because of this Histroy was my faviorte subject . what i mean some students apply their frist choice is good.

To sum up, some students apply their frsit choice because they are beleiveing frist choise has bring good luck, feeling happy and considering that the school condition is comfortable for them.