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Do you see any grammar errors here?

The research period lasted from June 1st to July 30th of 2007, and the sample population was 20 elder female patients confined to their beds, in an elder medical facility. 30 minute foot reflex massage was performed every other day for 8 weeks, and blood samples were extracted pre and post research to observe any changes in white corpuscle subtypes, which is responsible for immunity and blood stellate. The purpose of this research was to propose foot reflex massage as a method of mediation in practical administration of elders confined to their beds, and to serve as a primary data for pursuing an elder welfare policy.
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Hi,

Do you see any grammar errors here?

The research period lasted from June 1st to July 30th of 2007, and the sample population was 20 elder (see below) female patients, confined to their beds i n an elder (see below) medical facility. Thirty minutes of foot reflex massage was performed every other day for 8 weeks, and blood samples were extracted pre and post research to observe any changes in white corpuscle subtypes, which are responsible for immunity and blood stellate. The purpose of this research was to propose foot reflex massage as a method of mediation in practical administration



Is it proper to say 'The purpose of this research was to propose . . . '. It makes it sound biased.

How about 'The purpose of this research was to investigate . . . '?

The word 'elder' is not much used.

I suggest eg

older female patients

a medical facility for seniors

Clive
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That was amazing, thank you so much.