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With the Internet penetrating into every aspect of our life, it’s getting impossible to stay aside. You can’t ignore the World Wide Web with its millions of users, because it will ignore you. If you deal with vacation rentals business, but it’s not yet taken online, I wonder how you contrive to earn money…

“I wish I could work 24 hours a day as my web site does”, - said one of my friends. And here it is: the main secret of online presence: You may be in many right places at right times. In fact, time and place are always right in the Internet Emotion: smile
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KedraYou can’t ignore the World Wide Web with its millions of users, because it will ignore you.
I guess maybe you intended to say "or else it will ignore you"
Hi Kedra,

With the Internet penetrating into every aspect of our life, it’s getting impossible to stay aside. You can’t ignore the World Wide Web with its millions of users, because it will ignore you. If you deal with vacation rentals business, but it’s not yet taken online, I wonder how you contrive to earn money…

“I wish I could work 24 hours a day as my web site does”, - said one of my friends. And here it is: the main secret of online presence: You may be in many right places at right times. In fact, time and place are always right in the Internet

I have a few changes to suggest.

With the Internet penetrating every aspect of our life, it’s getting impossible to stay uninvolved. You can’t ignore the World Wide Web with its millions of users, or else it will ignore you. If you deal with the vacation rentals business, but you haven't yet gone online, I wonder how you manage to earn money…

“I wish I could work 24 hours a day as my web site does”, - said one of my friends. And here it is, the main secret of online presence: You can be in many right places at many right times. In fact, the time and place are always right on the Internet.

If you have any questions about these changes, please ask, OK?

Best wishes, Clive
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Kedra, this isn't a grammar comment, but if I were a business owner, I'd find the sentence "I wonder how you contrive to earn money" to be condescending, and it would really put me off. It's like you're saying, "Oh, you foolish little person. You just don't understand how it's done, do you?"

May I suggest you instead say something about how you are missing an opportunity to vastly increase your exposure to potential customers and increase your revenue, or somethign along those lines?
Thank you, Clive. The only question I have is about the verb "penetrate". I thought that it was an intransitive verb and required some preposition after it. At least this is what I saw in my PC dictionary. Now I am a bit confused.
Hi, Grammar Geek! Let me thank you for such a good remark. I had some doubts as per this, and I am grateful to you for bringing this to my attention. I can not post the same message into several topics (say, grammar, information techlonogy), that's why I rarely request to check style of the passage, though I need it badly. I am not a native speaker and every advice concerning my english, either grammar or vocabulary or style is valued by me. So, thank you once again. [Y]
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Hi again, Kedra,

'Penetrate' can be both transitive and intransitive. Maybe you need a more detailed dictionary?

I just offered suggestions without comment, but here is one comment. Never use two colons like this.

And here it is: the main secret of online presence: You may be in many right places at right times.

Best wishes again, Clive
Oh, I see. Thanks a lot for explanation.[Y]