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Johan moved to new office last week while Aine moved back to his old office on Monday after her maternity leave.

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Johan moved to a new office last week while Aine moved back to her his old office on Monday after her her maternity leave.


Clive

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No. "New office" needs an article or a possessive pronoun. "While" seems uncalled for. There has to be a comma joining the two clauses. It seems like someone has gone from male to female, or else "back" has to be changed to "into". We can't tell who had maternity leave.

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