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In our quest to learn how things move, the experience of hiking and other motion leads us to introduce the concepts of velocity, time, length, kilograms and temperature.

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I don't see what this has to do with "parallelism". To me the mention of "hiking" as an example of "motion" seems oddly specific and a bit strange. I suppose it could be explained by the wider context. I don't really understand what kilograms and temperature have to do with "how things move". "kilograms" is mismatched with the other items in the list as it is a unit of measurement. If you are talking about how far things move, or travel, consider saying "distance" rather than "length".

You could consider saying "our experience of" rather than "the experience of". Consider saying "understand" rather than "learn".

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Perhaps I asked the wrong question. How to rewrite this sentence to make noun phrases semantically parallel (equal) in meaning:

"In our quest to learn how things move, the experience of hiking and other motion leads us to introduce the concepts of velocity, time, length, kilograms and temperature."


Do you suggest: "In our quest to understand how things move, our experience of hiking and other motion leads us to introduce the concepts of velocity, time, length, kilograms and temperature."?

LeftHandedMysticHow to rewrite this sentence to make noun phrases semantically parallel (equal) in meaning:

I'm still not sure I understand what you mean. Which noun phrases are you referring to? Perhaps you are referring to "velocity, time, length, kilograms and temperature". These are nouns, not noun phrases. If you are talking about these, then the odd one out, as I said, is "kilograms", which is a unit of measurement not a dimension. The corresponding dimension word is "mass" (scientific) or "weight" (everyday, not scientific).

In our quest to learn how things move, the experience of hiking and other motion leads us to introduce the concepts of velocity, time, length, kilograms and temperature.

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In our quest to learn how things move, the experience of hiking and other motion leads us to introduce the concepts of velocity, time, length, mass and temperature.

in our quest to learn how things move, the experience of hiking and other motion leads us to introduce the concepts of velocity, time, length, kilograms and temperature.