My Crimson's Death

Know not my weaken heart to cry,
Persisted our liason I try,
Simply mine burden soul thou buried deep,
Yet mine content psyche thou turned to weep,

I long to hear thy voice,
Those tone thou composed the noise,
Mine lips hunger for thine kiss,
Lovin' I to thee who used to tease,

Avowed the world to thee I belong,
Forsaken silhouette!!! "Marry me"
Shook me awaken from a dream,
Spoke to me it was not him,

Muted mouth voided eye,
Grabbed a life cant I believe thou die,
Not a merry life with thee I savor yet,
What a hard heart not left to be kept,

Oh... my love, my love I sob,
Evicted hope mine soul thou now throb,
Insisted misery none can heal,
Mystery of ours now let seal
No. You have not eliminated the dated diction (thy, mine, avow, etc) and the meter is way off--

Know not my weaken heart to cry, u/u/u/u/
Persisted our liason I try, u/u/u/uu/
Simply mine burden soul thou buried deep, /uu/u/u/u/
Yet mine content psyche thou turned to weep, uu/u/uu/u/

BeatrixPersisted our liason I try,

What is a liason?