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In recent decades, much of the world has placed a premium on the knowledge and skills that students can obtain from education. While some people reckon that school curriculum should provide a wide variety of different subjects, others believe that one several particular ones are truly necessary. From my point of view, I believe the former view would bring more benefits for people compared with the latter.


To begin with, people who are equipped with numerous skills in many aspects will obviously have more knowledge and experience to deal with different obstacles taken place during their life. Needless to say, only a basic understanding about a field that people are not majoring in would support them to overcome some specific problems related to that speciality. By the way of illustration, anyone can protect themselves against dangers including electrical shock which appears to be an extremely popular motivation behind some immediate deaths recently if they have taken in much knowledge about physics phenomena around them. Therefore, not only could people prevent undesirable results to happen, but they also complete various daily tasks in an effective way.


What is more, living in such a competitive world, a bunch of skills may guarantee people with a promising career in the future. This is because, current employers show a tendency to recruit youngsters who can deal with an array of jobs within a position rather than specialists. Hence, a wide range of subjects during education years will definitely augment students with valuable flexibility and skills to manage multiple jobs in the future which will become the key element for choosing from recruiters. Consequently, this education curriculum will somehow reduce the risk of unemployment and boost the confidence amongst students.


In conclusion, learning different subjects are proved to be preponderant for university students as it would not only help them with the needs of fast-changing and competitive society, but it also be beneficial in just everyday troubles in their life.



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It is argued that university students should study a full range of subjects instead of some specific subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?


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In recent decades, (This has been true for centuries, not just decades!) Much of the world has placed a premium on the knowledge and skills that students can obtain from education. While some people reckon (This is a very informal verb. It is not suited for academic essays.) that school curriculum (It is not about the secondary school curriculum. It is about university students' choice of courses.) should provide a wide variety of different subjects, (off topic) others believe that one several particular ones are truly necessary. From my point of view, I believe the former view would bring more benefits for people compared with the latter.

(You did not answer the essay prompt. This is not an advantages/ disadvantages type of essay. You must answer this question: "To what extent do you agree or disagree?"

You must answer with an adverb of extent.


To begin with, people who are equipped with numerous skills in many fields aspects will obviously have more knowledge and experience to deal with different obstacles taken (wrong verb form) place during their life. Needless to say, only a basic understanding about a field that people are not majoring in would support them to overcome some specific problems related to that speciality. By the way of illustration, anyone can protect themselves against dangers including electrical shock which appears to be an extremely popular motivation behind some immediate deaths recently (poor English - are people motivated to kill themselves?) if they have taken in much knowledge about physics (wrong word) phenomena (wrong word) around them. (Are you thinking about lightning strikes? Avoiding being killed by lightning is not a university course; it is just common sense.) Therefore, not only could people prevent undesirable results to happen, but they also complete various daily tasks in an effective way.


What is more, living in such a competitive world, a bunch of (Informal) skills may guarantee people with a promising career in the future. This is because, current employers show a tendency to recruit youngsters (A youngster is a child aged 7-12. They are not job candidates.) who can deal with an array of jobs within a position rather than specialists. Hence, a wide range of subjects during university education years will definitely augment give students with valuable the flexibility and skills to manage multiple jobs in the future which will become the key element for choosing from recruiters. Consequently, this education curriculum will somehow reduce the risk of unemployment and boost the confidence amongst students.


In conclusion, learning different subjects are proved to be preponderant (wrong word) for university students as it would not only help them with the needs of fast-changing and competitive society, but it also be beneficial in just everyday troubles in their life.


The topic is about students' choice of courses in university.

Should they take introductory courses in a range of subjects such as psychology, theater, biology, physics, world history, French, mechanical engineering, Economics, Geography, and Political theory, or should they follow a degree program in a major subject such as computer science, education or music?