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In today’s world, one of the most increasing concerns across the globe is the quantity of waste generated by humans. This essay will uncover the major causes behind this environmental issue and suggest some potential solutions.


There are two obvious reasons that a large amount of rubbish disposed of by humans is becoming a global issue. The first cause is overpopulation which leads to overflowing garbage all over the world. In other words, the more people are living, the more household waste is produced and vastly improperly thrown into the environment. Inadequate waste management system is the second contributor to this worldwide environmental issue. It is evident that in many countries which depend economically on industrial activities, industrial waste is uncontrollably released into the water without being treated by waste treatment facilities.


Several measures can be taken to improve this situation. First of all, the government should enforce laws so that the citizens would slim down their personal carbon footprint and the amount of garbage would be narrowed down. Secondly, there must be waste treatment systems installed for all categories of waste to keep the habitat of humans and species clean and purified. Ultimately, countries throughout the world need to cooperate to run some global campaigns which help raise people’s awareness about the daily disposal of a huge amount of rubbish being an urgent problem to the Earth.


In conclusion, the booming population and the lack of waste management systems contribute to the large quantity of rubbish created by humans becoming a global issue. If both the government and the citizens take actions following the aforementioned solutions, this situation can be prevented from deteriorating further.

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It is generally agreed that the amount of rubbish created by humans today is a worldwide problem. What do you think are the main causes of this situation? What measures can be used to tackle the problem?


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In today’s world, one of the most serious increasing concerns across the globe is the quantity of waste we generate. The main cause is overpopulation and lack of attention to the environment. However, the governments and citizens can cooperate to alleviate the problem. d by humans. This essay will uncover the major causes behind this environmental issue and suggest some potential solutions.

Do not mention your essay. The examiner already knows that you are going to write about the issue described. That is the essay format.

Instead, you must write a thesis statement. The thesis statement addresses the essay prompts and gives the reader an idea of your main points. I wrote an example in red text.


There are two obvious reasons that the a large amount of rubbish we disposed of by humans (Native speakers do not use "human" when they mean "people". This noun is only used when comparing us to other biological or artificial life forms.) is becoming a global issue. The first cause is overpopulation which leads to overflowing garbage all over the world. In other words, the more people there are are living, the more household waste is produced and vastly (wrong word) improperly thrown into the environment. Inadequate waste management system (wrong form) is (wrong form) the second contributor to this worldwide environmental issue. It is evident that in many countries which depend economically on industrial activities, industrial waste is uncontrollably released into the water without being treated by waste treatment facilities.


Several measures can be taken to improve this situation. First of all, the government should enforce laws so that the citizens would slim down their personal carbon footprint (off-topic. The subject is not climate change.) and the amount of garbage would be narrowed down. Secondly, Second, there must be waste treatment systems installed for all categories of waste to keep the habitat of humans and species clean and purified. (That is unnatural. How does this measure reduce the quantity of garbage?) Ultimately, countries throughout the world need to cooperate to run some global campaigns which help raise people’s awareness about the daily disposal of a huge amount of rubbish being an urgent problem to the Earth.


In conclusion, the booming population and the lack of waste management systems contribute to the large quantity of rubbish created by humans becoming a global issue. If both the government and the citizens take actions following the aforementioned solutions, (avoid "aforementioned") this situation can be prevented from deteriorating further.


You missed one very salient point:

Research has studied garbage in landfills and discovered that most of what we discard can be reused. If we would recycle 80% of our garbage, there would be no problem with the volume of waste. Metals and glass can easily be melted down and purified to make new products such as tins and containers. Kitchen waste and garden cuttings can be composted and that good rich soil used for the glower garden instead of chemical fertilizers. Paper and plastic and be reused to make newsprint, cartons, pillow stuffing or even toys. Electronic devices that are broken and thrown away have very valuable components such as rare earth minerals. These can be extracted and sold to pay for the recycling effort.

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Thanks a lot for your comment. Can I ask you why I should avoid the word "aforementioned" in IELTS writing?

Students: We have free audio pronunciation exercises.

Because it is very old-fashioned and nearly archaic. Native speakers use these in only very stilted (e.g. legal) contexts.

Use a demonstrative pronoun, that is what these pronouns are for.

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In conclusion, because of these reasons.... (You just wrote 2 body paragraphs with reasons. It is even better to write a phrase describing the reasons if possible).

In conclusion, because of their low cost and convenience, ...