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In recent years, unspoilt natural areas have become a place of interest for scientists and visitors to discover. Although the trend of travelling to these places brings some merits, drawbacks of it may be more significant.

On the one hand, discovering natural environment might bring a number of benefits. First, scientists can now excavate more mysterious antiques of people from the past and explore exotic species. As a result, they stand a chance of devising more tools for biotechnology or publishing new theories, thereby creating a breakthrough for humanity. Second, visiting these remote places could be a unique and distinctive experience for travellers. This is because they can enjoy the tranquil vibe and immerse in the world of diverse fauna and flora that they couldn’t find in busy cities, so that they have a chance to inhale more fresh air and escape from the hustle and bustle of urbanisation.

On the other hand, drawbacks of visiting remote natural spots may be more immense. To begin with, the more flocks of tourists travel to these scenic landscapes, the more these places degenerate. Some travellers, in fact, don’t conscious of their unkind actions they did to the environment here, which deteriorates the stunning scenery and decreases the biological diversity there. On top of that, the presence of visitors in these locations might pose massive threat to the local. If visitors have positive feedbacks of natural travel locations they have visited, investors may allocate their money for projects of constructing new hotels and recreational facilities here. Consequently, indigenous people may be on the verge of losing their cultural identity and even be evicted from their accommodation.

In conclusion, while the idea of visiting picturesque scenery in distant regions might sound exciting, I myself believe that the merits of this trend cannot justify its disadvantages.

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It is now possible for scientists and tourists to travel to remote natural environment, such as the South Pole. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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Tourists cannot go to the South Pole. There is nothing there but snow and ice - no animals, no vegetation, and no settlements. No human being in the past ever lived there. Besides having a flat and uninteresting terrain, the weather is inhospitable and frigid - exposed skin freezes in a few moments. Also there is only one sunrise and one sunset per year. Half of the year is night, and the other half, day. Early explorers who attempted the journey, died on the way.

Presently, there is a scientific research station where only a limited number of scientists do research. All food and supplies have to be flown in, and flights are impossible in the dark months.

There is no transportation available for any tourists to go to this place, and there is no reason any normal person would want to go anyway.

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In recent years, unspoilt natural areas have become a place (wrong form. "areas" is plural, so you must be consistent with the plural form.) of interest for scientists and visitors to discover. Although the trend of travelling to these places has merit, brings some merits, (wrong expression) the drawbacks of it may be are more significant.

On the one hand, discovering a natural habitat environment might bring have a number of benefits. First, scientists can now excavate more mysterious antiques of people from the past (That makes no sense.) remnants of past civilizations and explore exotic find new species of plants and animals. As a result, they stand a chance of devising more tools for biotechnology (Please give an example of this kind of tool.) or publishing new theories, thereby creating a breakthrough for humanity. Second, visiting these remote places could be a unique and distinctive experience for travellers. This is because they can enjoy the tranquil vibe (wrong word) and immerse in the world of diverse fauna and flora that they couldn’t (Do not use contractions in formal essays.) find in busy cities, so that they have a chance to inhale more fresh air and escape from the hustle and bustle of urbanisation. (wrong word)

On the other hand, drawbacks of visiting remote natural spots may be more are immense. To begin with, the more flocks of tourists travel to these scenic landscapes, the more these places degenerate. Some travellers, in fact, don’t conscious (ungrammatical) of their unkind actions they did to the environment here, which deteriorates the stunning scenery and decreases the biological diversity there. On top of that, the presence of visitors in these locations might pose massive threat to the local. (wrong word - local is an adjective. It needs a noun.) If visitors have positive feedbacks (wrong form) of natural travel locations they have visited, investors may allocate their money for projects of constructing new hotels and recreational facilities here. Consequently, indigenous people may be on the verge of losing their cultural identity and even be evicted from their accommodation.(Why and how? You need to justify your statements.)

In conclusion, while the idea of visiting picturesque scenery in distant regions might sound exciting, I myself believe that the merits of this trend cannot justify its disadvantages.