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A woman is the greatest and the precious gift we receive from the Almighty. On the Woman’s Day, we are launching special collection, The Renaissance Collection

Inspired by the Renaissance Era, each Renaissance jewellery piece is as unique as you are. ‘The Renaissance Collection’ is about romance, fantasy and sophistication. Come and join us on the launch these astounding pieces of Gold jewellery, ‘The Renaissance Collection’. It’s for someone you love, someone who holds your heart. Let her heart overflow with joy.
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CreativeguruA woman is the greatest and the most precious gift we receive from the Almighty. On the Women’s Day, we are launching a special collection, The Renaissance Collection.
Inspired by the Renaissance Era, each Renaissance jewellery piece is as unique as you are. ‘The Renaissance Collection’ is about romance, fantasy and sophistication. Come and join us on the launch of this astounding pieces of Gold jewellery, ‘The Renaissance Collection’. They are for someone you love, someone who holds your heart. Let her heart overflow with joy.
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CreativeguruA woman is the greatest and the most precious gift we receive from the Almighty. On the Women’s Day, we are launching a special collection, The Renaissance Collection.
Inspired by the Renaissance Era, each Renaissance jewellery piece is as unique as you are. ‘The Renaissance Collection’ is about romance, fantasy and sophistication. Come and join us on the launch of this astounding pieces of Gold jewellery, ‘The Renaissance Collection’. They are for someone you love, someone who holds your heart. Let her heart overflow with joy.
Hi,

In my opinion, the underlined part should be reworded as follows:

this collection of astounding pieces of gold jewelery. They
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Come and join us on the launch of this astounding pieces of Gold jewellery, ‘The Renaissance Collection’. They are for someone you love, someone who holds your heart. Let her heart overflow with joy.

I think it should be 'at the launch'.
I have no idea about "on the launch of" or "at the launch of". But, if I catch his boss, I will try to persuade him to write the paragraphs myself. (Kidding!)
Yoong LiatHi

Come and join us on the launch of this astounding pieces of Gold jewellery, ‘The Renaissance Collection’. They are for someone you love, someone who holds your heart. Let her heart overflow with joy.

I think it should be 'at the launch'.
Hi Yoong Liat,

'At the launch" is OK too. Some people do use 'on' (e.g., http://www.successbythebook.com / )

When we think in term of 'a launch event', 'at' is suitable; in term of 'a launch occasion (i.e. a significant event)', 'on' could certainly be used. IMO.
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Yoong LiatHi

Come and join us on the launch of this astounding pieces of Gold jewellery, ‘The Renaissance Collection’. They are for someone you love, someone who holds your heart. Let her heart overflow with joy.

I think it should be 'at the launch'.
Hi Yoong Liat,

'At the launch" is OK too. Some people do use 'on' (e.g., http://www.successbythebook.com / )

When we think in terms of 'a launch event', 'at' is suitable; in terms of 'a launch occasion (i.e. a significant event)', 'on' could certainly be used. IMO.
Thanks for the reply and helping me out and even i agree with you that it should be at the launch rather the on the launch but one more thing i think it should be these astounding pieces rather than this astounding pieces as pieces is plural kindly tell me
Yes, use "these" instead of "this."
Don't capitalize Gold - just gold.
I find "astouding" to be too strong. "Stunning" is perhaps a better choice.

What do you want them to do when you say "come and join us"? Are you inviting them to a party? Is there a special event going on in the store to celebrate this new jewelry line?

Also, who is this targeted to? First you say "as unique as you are" which sounds like it's targeting the lady who will wear it, but then you imply that you should buy it as a gift for someone else. It's a confused message.
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