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1. Roozbeh is a crazy sleeper. He often talks in his sleep. One time, I heard him say, “More wings! More wings! More wings!” Sometimes he looks right at you, talks to you, even asking how you are, but he never remembers it in the morning.

2. Roozbeh is a crazy sleeper. He often talks in his sleep. One time, I heard him say, “More wings! More wings! More wings!” Sometimes he looks right at you, talks to you, even asks how you are, but he never remembers it in the morning.


My student thinks the version #1 is wrong and it should have been written as #2. To me, it's fine either way because in "talks to you, even asking how you are" the phrase "[sometimes] even asking how you are" modifies "talks to you," while in version #2 talking to the listener and asking how the listener is are mentioned as two different things. Both versions can be describing the same situation, but they do so in slightly different ways.

1. "Sometimes he looks right at you, talks to you, even asking how you are." (Sometimes when he looks right at you and talks to you he's asking how you are.)

2. "Sometimes he looks right at you, talks to you, even asks how you are." (Sometimes he looks right at you and talks to you. Sometimes he even looks right at you and asks how you are.)


In other words, In "even asking how you are", the asking is part of the talking. In "even asks how you are", the asking is a separate action, as is the looking.


What do you think?

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I agree with you.

Clive

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Mr genuineOne time,

This is wordy. Once would be sufficient.