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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language in primary schools rather than in secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?


Nowadays, many people, especially parents, are concerned about when they should allow their children to learn a new language besides their mother tongue. While it is argued that youngsters will gain more benefits if they start learning another language in primary schools rather than in secondary schools, I totally believe that these merits can exceed these drawbacks.

There are many advantages of learning a foreign language in primary schools, one of which is to help children become more confident in using a new language. Through the curriculum in primary schools, pupils tend to be more familiar with different languages. Thus, they will be more confident in contacting and communicating with other people in foreign languages, which they are taught in schools compared with those in secondary schools.

Another benefit associated with learning another language in primary schools is that it builds a more united community, particularly in multi-language places or countries. For example, children, because of different mother languages such as Chinese and Malaysian, are forced to learn English from primary school in Singapore. This aims to create new generations who are able to speak a specific but unpopular language to have more opportunities in the international environment. They are less likely to feel separated from other people when they live and work in their nation.

However, this tendency also contains some negative effects, one of which is an increase in the loss of uncommon languages, particularly minority languages. When young students do not understand their mother language enough but have to learn a foreign one to meet demands in schools, which can result in forgetting their own language. There is no denying that many experts argue that losing a language can lead to the vanishing of a custom, which is a consequence that no one wants.

In conclusion, although learning a foreign language from primary schools is responsible for the likelihood of losing minority languages and traditional values, I still believe that these benefits, including building confidence and a united society, outweigh the other side.

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You've written too many words (339). First, write a small body paragraph about the disadvantages. Then, write a longer one about the advantages. Aim for a maximum of 175-180 words. Re-organize your ideas, revise your essay, and repost it below.

Thanks Teechr so much. Here is my new one. I hope that I don't make you mad because of my faults Emotion: sad(
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Many people nowadays are concerned about when they should allow their children to learn a new language besides their mother tongue. Personally, if youngsters have the opportunity to learn another language in primary schools, the merits of this can exceed these drawbacks.

This tendency has some negative effects, one of which is an increase in the loss of minority languages, resulting in the vashing of other traditional values of their community. According to lingustics, a language no longer exists not due to the small number of users but to the age of speakers. When pupils learning a new language in primary school tend to forget their native language more quickly than those in secondary school, this makes them take less pride in their minority languages and culture. In other words, this is one of the significant factors in the disappearance of unique but uncommon languages in the world.

However, there is no denying that there are also many advantages for innocent students and national unity. First, children will become more confident in using foreign languages through the curriculum in primary schools. They are likely to contact and communicate with other people in foreign languages, creating more benefits for their career in the global environment in later life. Another benefit is that it builds a united community, particularly in multi-language countries. For example, children with different mother languages such as Chinese and Malaysian are forced to learn English in primary schools in Singapore, which aims to help students not feel separated from other people speaking different languages in their class.

In conclusion, I still believe that learning a foreign language in primary schools can bring benefits, including building confidence and a united society, despite their responsibilities for the growing likelihood of losing minority languages.
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Loan Tranit builds a united community, particularly in multi-language countries.

That's the only usable point in the entire essay.

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Your first body paragraph has two fatal flaws:

1 - It is off topic. There is no provable connection between the decline of minority languages and teaching children a foreign language in primary school.

2 - It just discusses on point. A good body paragraph should deal with several points (as evidence) to convince the reader.

I suggest you start from the beginning again and rethink your essay.

Try to fill in the following two lists (I've helped you with one point) and post them below. Do not write full sentences for now. Search the internet if you cannot come up with useful ideas.


Advantages of learning a foreign language in primary school:

- helps build a united community in multilingual countries.

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Disadvantages of learning a foreign language in primary school:

- Can put undue pressure on young children.

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Dear Teechr,
I have re-written this essay with main ideas:
- Disadvantages:
+ Study pressures ( students have many assignments -> increase pressures -> harmful for their development)

+ Less pround of their mother tongue ( students tend to use foreign language in schools -> don't understand mother tongue's value -> lack of pride)
- Advantages:
+ Enhance national unity ( many languages in some nations-> need a national unity -> not feel separated and have a united curriculum)

+ Enrich their lives ( abilities to make more friends and get more knowledge)
And this is my new essay, I wish you can give me some comments, which actually helps me so much!
Many thanks!
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Many people nowadays are concerned about when they should allow their children to learn a new language besides their mother tongue. In my viewpoint, if students have to study another language in primary schools, this can bring more merits than drawbacks.

This tendency has some negative effects, one of which significantly contributes to growing study pressures. Although educating primary school-aged children should provide an incentive for both mental and physical development, in reality, innocent students facing many assignments hardly have spare time to play. Thus, teaching a foreign language at these ages will increase the likelihood of pressure on the child, resulting in detrimental impacts on their growth in later life. Another disadvantage is that students are able to take less pride in their native language. As learning foreign languages in primary schools makes them not aware of their mother tongue’s values, they no longer use their native language when being familiar with communicating with others in another one.

However, there is no denying that there are various advantages. This trend helps enhance national unity in multilingual countries such as Singapore and India, where each community processes a different language. Learning a foreign language in primary schools aims to create a united curriculum and make students not feel separated when other people speak different languages in their class. Furthermore, this brings more opportunities for them in global integration. It is easy for children to contact international friends or read books written in foreign languages, meaning that students are likely to expand their knowledge and horizons without worrying about language barriers.

In conclusion, I believe that these merits, associated with improvement in unity and opportunities to enrich their lives, exceed these drawbacks related to study pressures and lack of pride in their mother tongue.
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Many people nowadays are concerned about when they should allow their children to learn a new language. Some argue that it is best to start in primary school. besides their mother tongue. [ 1] In my viewpoint, if students have to study another language in primary schools, this I agree with that because I believe it can bring more merits than drawbacks.

This tendency has some negative effects, On the one hand, teaching young children a foreign language can cause some problems. one of which significantly First, it contributes to growing study pressure. Although educating primary school-aged children should provide an incentive for focus on both mental and physical development, in reality, innocent students facing primary school kids often have much homework and [ 2] many assignments hardly have spare time to play. Thus, teaching a foreign language at these ages a young age will increase the likelihood of pressure on the child. , resulting in detrimental impacts on their growth in later life. Another disadvantage is that students are able to take less pride in the foreign language may compete with their native language . As learning foreign languages in primary schools makes them not aware of their mother tongue’s in terms of associated cultural values and communication. , they no longer use their native language when being familiar with communicating with others in another one.

However, there is no denying that there are various advantages to starting to learn a second language at an early age. This trend Firstly, it helps enhance national unity in multilingual countries such as Singapore and India. , where each community processes a different language. Learning a foreign language in primary schools aims helps to create a united curriculum common tongue and make students not feel separated excluded when other people speak different languages in their class. Furthermore, this brings it gives them more opportunities for them when they grow up and look for a job. in global integration. It Knowledge of a foreign language makes it is easy for children to contact international friends or read books written in foreign languages, meaning that students they are likely to expand their knowledge and horizons without worrying about language barriers.

In conclusion, I believe that these merits, associated with improvement in unity and opportunities to enrich their lives, exceed these despite drawbacks related to study pressure and increased study load, learning a foreign language in primary school helps to cement community ties in multilingual settings and gives children better prospects for their future. lack of pride in their mother tongue.

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[ 1]: “In my viewpoint” is unnatural.

[ 2]: primary school children do not have assignments.

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Thanks Teechr so much! After reading your comments and ideas, I feel my eassay better to understand the former one.

Loan TranThanks Teechr so much!

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Loan TranAfter reading your comments and ideas, I feel my essay is better to understand than the former one.

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