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Sources said a group of 12 armed militants belonging to SS faction of the BTM party led by PP raided the village of AA and abducted Mr. LLK, 48, a member of ZZ Council, from his home.

(1) What impression do you get by “led by PP” – BTM party being led by PP or 12 armed militants led by PP? What I want to mean is PP leading the 12 armed militants in the raid.

(2) If structure does not reflect what I wanted to mean, please rephrase it for me.

(3) Are there any other mistakes in the sentence? Thanks.
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(1) My impression is that PP is the leader of the SS faction. He was not very likely the leader of the raiding party. (The 12 raiders belonged to his faction.)

If I understand you correctly, you want me to rephrase the original sentence so that PP is described as the leader of the raid, and not as the leader of the SS faction.

You'll have to give me leave not to put it all in one sentence.

Sources said a group of 12 armed militants led by PP raided the village of AA and abducted a council member from his home. The abductee, Mr. LLK, 48, is a member of ZZ Council. The militants belong to the SS faction of the BTM party.

Sorry - not very good.
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Thanks Avangi. This is what I wanted. The problem was that the thought of puttiing the whole idea into three complete sentences did never occur to me.