Hi,

I want to apply for an intership and I need somebody to take a look at it. It would be very kind if somebody could help me with it. Thanks a lot.

philoo

Dear Madam or Sir,

The reason for contacting you is my intent to apply for the internship position offered by your organization. After visiting your website I am convinced that the activities of ……. match well with my interests and my so far gained experiences.

Currently, I am studying political science with an emphasis on peace and conflict studies at the University of ……., . The knowledge obtained during my academic activities and my interests refer to the study of conflict and conflict resolution in the African context. Above all I am interested in the different approaches explaining the emergence of conflict. Therefore I attended several subject related seminars and in consequence I posses a good knowledge of the existing literature.

It might be appropriate to mention that during my studies I was able to gain some professional experience by working as a student assistant for . ……… at the Institute of ………… at the University of ……….. Notably I assisted in the research work of the Institute. Among other things I worked on the editing of the English textbook “International Institutions – Polity, Politics, and Policy”, which was published recently. The activity within the institute allowed me to improve my analytical skills as well as my team working abilities. Attached to my application you will find a letter of recommendation from . ……… .

Moreover I could already gain some international experience. During my schooldays I attended an exchange programme and lived a year in the . The previous academic year I pursued my studies, in the framework of an ERASMUS scholarship, at the University ………, . In September of this year I will intern for three month at the ………… in , where I will be concerned with question related to terrorism. In conclusion I am familiar with multicultural working environments, and besides my mother tongue I have a very good command of English and French.

I have no doubts that my work in your organization would be mutual beneficial. Such an internship would provide me with the ideal opportunity to obtain important experiences in regard to my future professional career, which I see in the field of conflict studies. More importantly, I am convinced that your organization and the vision for which it stands would benefit as well.

For an internship I would be available from mars 2007 for a period of three to six month. Should you have any questions do not hesitate to contact me via email (………..).

Thank you for your time and consideration. I hope to hear from you soon.

Sincerely,
1. Run a spell-check. You seem to have problems with plurals as well, so work on that.

2. Re-write the first paragraph. The first sentence has you tying yourself in knots. Just state that you are writing to apply for the internship. The second sentence needs to take a different emphasis: why should they care what you want - they want to know that you have got what they want!

Moreover I have already gained some international experience.

lived in the USA for a year

intern for three months at...

questions relating to terrorism.

You don't state what your mother tongue actually is.

"I have no doubts that my work in your organization would be mutual beneficial. Such an internship would provide me with the ideal opportunity to obtain important experiences in regard to my future professional career, which I see in the field of conflict studies. More importantly, I am convinced that your organization and the vision for which it stands would benefit as well." Again - it's ok to mention how it will help your future career but what they are interested in is HOW will they benefit by choosing you instead of one of the other candidates.

March (proper noun so needs a capital letter and English spelling) 2007 for a period of three to six months
Thanks a lot for your help. Your comments are very useful. It is the first time that I posted something on this site and I really do appreciate your correction. Have a good day.