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Hello everybody,
I am applying for a very interesting internship and have to write a letter of motivation. I have posted the letter underneath. It would be just great if someone who knows a lot about this type of letter could read it and give me some good advice.

The letter is - together with a CV - send via E-mail to a student organisation in the Dominican Republic. A representative of this organization will introduce my application to the company. This is common practice in the organisation and ok with the company.
I do have three questions:
For this particular case, do I need to put adresses on top of the letter?
Do I put "enclosures" on the letter?
May I put the heading "Letter of Motivation" on top?

There you have the letter:
Letter of Motivation

Dear Mr. <<name>>:

If you are looking for a young and energetic person who is seeking new challenges and is willing to contribute to your company’s success, I would like to encourage you to consider my application.
I am a 23 year old, highly motivated student of business administration at Technical University of Chemnitz, Germany. Apart from studying, I spend a lot of time supporting my mother’s corporation which is entering the Chinese market.

After my studies I would like to start in a marketing department or as a project manager. In the long run I am planning to start my own business. In order to get further practical experiences and attaining additional soft skills, I would like to do an internship.

An internship abroad provides a lot of chances: giving a view on solving problems differently, establishing new connections, giving material for new perspectives and ideas, and last but not least it provides the opportunity to identify additional strength and weaknesses. This internship at <<company name>> provides exciting contents. For me, it is even more important that the internship appears to become a potential challenge. Solving a pretentious task offers a high added value for both – the company and the trainee.

Being an optimistic and creative team player with very good presentation skills and a wide range of interests, I am also able to work self-contained. Not only personal strengths in analytical thinking, problem solving and identifying the determining factors of success, but also very good communication skills and a high familiarity with the English and German language make me feel being the right person for this internship. Furthermore, I am now in the 7th semester and have passed all required courses and tests for the final examination. In respect of attained knowledge there should not be a big difference to a university graduate.

Being accepted for this internship, I would intensify the study of the Spanish language in order to attain a good basis. This shall ensure a quick improvement during the first weeks in the with purpose to simplify the communication within your company and beyond. Besides, I could - in advance - review or research a certain topic given by the company to be well prepared for the internship.

I am keen on supporting your company and would like to start as soon as possible. A visa would be granted from the embassy of the within 14 days. If you have some questions, please contact me by phone or e-mail.

ours faithfully,

<<my name>>
Comments  
Hey, I have to go in few minutes, so I can't help you with your letter more carefully. I just answer your questions. Emotion: wink

1. It is more formal if you put the address on the top of the letter! Remember to put the date! It's the formal form of British people. Emotion: wink
2. You NEEDN'T put enclosures in motivation letter.
3. You NEEDN'T put the heading. But there is no problem if you put it.

Your motivation letter structure is excellent, I think. In the last pharagraph, I think you should put "I'm looking for getting feedback from you." and then "If you had any questions, please feel free to contact me." like you did. Good luck with your motivation letter! Emotion: wink

Regards,
Tammy
Thank you very much for your hints.

As far as I am concerned, my letter is not yet fluent enough: Jumping from one part to another. In addition I will add the main courses of my studies which are related to the traineeship.

If someone could give some suggestions on how to make that letter more readable? Emotion: surprise)
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2 additional questions:

I am not sure whether to delete the second last paragraph. I have read that you should write into that kind of letter about what you think to do, when you are accepted. This paragraph might be too long and not the appropriate content. Ideas?

"Being accepted for this internship, I would intensify the study of the Spanish language in order to attain a good basis. This shall ensure a quick improvement during the first weeks in the lace>Dominican Republiclace> with purpose to simplify the communication within your company and beyond. Besides, I could - in advance - review or research a certain topic given by the company to be well prepared for the internship."

Did anybody find some mistakes in the letter?
I think you make some good points in this paragraph but it needs some re-phrasing.

> >If I am accepted for this internship, I will intensify my study of the Spanish language to achieve a good basic understanding. Then I will improve even more during my first weeks in theDominican Republic so that communication within your company and beyond will not be too difficult. I am also happy to do some advance research on any suggested topics so that I would be well-prepared for the internship.>>
Thanks a lot for your suggestions.

I can see your point. The problem is, that I don´t speak any Spanish, yet. The only thing I can say is "Yo ne habla Espanol." Emotion: surprise) Communication within the company will exclusively be in German or English. But I thought it could be a good idea to show that I am willing to learn. Maybe I will only stay with the very last "do some research"-sentence.
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any other ideas?
Im a graduate of medicine could you help me in writting up my motivation letter for postgraduate study
Do you know what to put in a letter of motivation? You might want to research the internet about what points a letter of motivation shall cover.

- something about your person
- your future objectives
- why do you apply
- what are your benefits if you are taken
- how can the company benefit of you
- why are you better than others, what makes you better
- if you are applying in a foreign country: what makes you better than the national people
- how did you prepare so far, and how are you planning to prepare when you are taken

The most important thing is, to convince the company, that you are the one they are looking for! That they need you, and that there will be no alternative but you!
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