Hi!
I'm applying for a volunteer work in few of the EVS projects (I don't know is it familiar to you - it's a kind of an exchange of students in purpose of learning a language and working on yourself by doing a job like an engagement in youth rights, or preparing a film festival or doing some cultural work, etc. - it's domaine of works is pretty various, but al of them require working with people) and I have to write a cover letter, but it has to be pretty general because I have to write only one letter wich will be used in all my applys. Also, people reading this kind of letter pretty much are students, young people, so I figured it would be better not to write so formal as usally. Or I'm I wrong?
I'd be very grateful if you'd give me any suggestions how to improve my letter writen below this text and if you could point out my gramatical mistakes, I'm sure there are a lot of them.
Thanks a lot, lots of kisses from Croatia:)!

Salut!

My name is ---, I'm a 22 years old student at 3rd year of french and philosophy at ---. When finding out of this kind of volunteering I immediately knew I want to be a part of it. With this letter I would like to apply for the participation as a volunteer in your EVS project and through it I'd like to bring you closer how deeply I would like to become a part of your team and why I think you'd make a great decision choosing me.
You're probably asking yourself why I'm so sure of myself and what is that what I can offer more than someone else? Well...

As I already mentioned, being a student of french language and it's literature and also being an admirer of it's country's great history and rich culture, I'm really eager to develop my language skills and to improve my speaking french whilst gaining valuable experience and knowledge. As well, I'd like to learn about other cultures and various people.

I started to learn french not before my first year of college so this kind of opportunity would mean a great deal for my professional as well for my personal improvement. I'm an highly motivated, hard-working, tolerante and dynamic individual with expressed comunicating and organisation skills. During my time as a student I gathered a big amount of experinece in working with people in wide range of jobs (being a promotor, hostese, waitresse) that I did as a member of the Student Service in my city. I also volunteered at animal shelter for two years (Noina arka) and I have participated in our Society of francophone students in Croatia for two years now. In year 2005. I went through a training curse to be an animator at seaside resorts.

Like you see, I have kept myself busy:).

Well, doing all that I learned I enjoy working with people and that it fullfills me. And I'm really good at it. I easily adopt in any work enviroment and in working as a part of a group. Although neither an individual work that requires an initiative and responsable person with a sens of personal organisation doesn't represent any problem to me; I act equally good in both surroundings and I cope effectively with all kinds of demands put in front of me.

I'm a computer literate and I speak, read and use both english and french. But I also think that there's a lot more work in front of me to achieve a level of a perfectly spoken french. Passively I use slovenian and I also learned deaf-mute language for a year.

Privatly, I like sports and dancing. Depending of my free time and my mood I ride my bike, I swimm, I run. But for the past year I put myself mostly in ballet dancing lessons which I really enjoy. Also I adore to read. Everything. Wether(?) it's a daily or weekly press, all sorts of magazines, romans, Internet sites – from yellow pages to scientific articles, arts to love themes – I swallow it all in one breath. Any gatherings or activities of all kinds including people spending time together always will drow my attention. I'm a big filmophile and I enjoy music. And if you add a good cup of coffee with a fresh croissant accompanying it, plus my family and friends, with whom I share all my interests and free time, that's my winning choice.

I'm sure you have already got an idea of how much I'd like to come and become a player in your team, but all the same, I'll use one more opportunity to express how strongly I desire to volounteer in your EVS project and how I'm convicted I have a lot to contribute with my experience and personality as your team member. The changes and all the adjustements that I would be confronted with do not frighten me, moreover, they challenge me. All potential shortfalls that will occure I'm willing to compensate with my maximum effort and doing my best. I'm very ambitious, prepaired to learn and ready to adopt new skills. I would be very gratefull if you'd give me a chance to represent all my qualities and ambitions in person, working for you. As I already said, this opportunity means to me a lot and represents a big possibility in enriching myself as a person as well as developing myself in professional sense.

I thank you for your time spent reading this letter and I hope for a positive response. If you have any questions, please contact me through --- or my perssonal e-mail address ---

I look forward to hearing from you.

Best regards,

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My corrections / suggestions highlighted in blue:

Only letters written to friends and family is informal. All other letters should be treated as formal.

You will have to excuse me if my comments come across as rude.
AnonymousGreetings.

I am a 22 year old, 3rd year student of French and philosophy at ---. When I found out that I could volunteer for [the following], I immediately knew I wanted to be a part of this project. With this letter I would like to apply for the participation as a volunteer. (removed) I can not begin to express how eager I am to become a part of your team.
(Sentence removed)

As a student of the French language, literature, and the underlying culture, I am eager to develop my language skills and improve my French speaking ability, by gaining valuable experience and knowledge. [removed - not relevant]

This opportunity would mean a great deal for my professional and personal growth. I am a highly motivated, tolerant and dynamic individual with outstanding communication and organisation skills. During my time as a student I obtained experience in working with a wide spectrum of people in the business world. I have been a promoter, a host and waitress and I also volunteered at an animal shelter for two years. I have participated in the society of [francophone students?] in Croatia for two years and in 2005 I went through a training course to be an animator at seaside resorts.

[Removed - too informal]

I enjoy working with people and know how to deal with any conflicts that may arise. I can adjust easily to fit into any work environment and have no problem working as part of a group. I can also function individually by taking the initiative and the responsibility to accomplish my tasks on my own. I can perform equally good in any environment and cope effectively the stress of reaching a deadline.

I am computer literate and well versed in the usage of both English and French. I continuously strive to perfect my French speaking ability. [Passively I use Slovenian and I also learned deaf-mute language for a year - How does this relate to your application?]

I enjoy sports and dancing. Depending of my free time I go cycling, swimming or jogging. (Removed - you already mentioned dancing) Reading is also an important part of my day, which expand and broaden my language skills. My other activities and interests include listening to music, watching movies and spending time with my friends and family.

[I'm sure you have already got an idea of how much I'd like to come and become a player in your team - Try to expand on this. Give more reasons why they should consider you for this project. Focus on your strong points and define them here.]

[contribute with my experience and personality as your team member - already mentioned before]. I am quick to adapt to new situations and enjoy challenges in my work. [All potential shortfalls that will occur I'm willing to compensate with my maximum effort and doing my best - Irrelevant. Prospective employers (even if you are just volunteering) are not looking for excuses. They expect you to be confident, and to be motivated enough to give your best before you start working.] I am ambitious, ready to learn and eager to adopt new skills.

I would be very grateful if you would give me a chance to contribute to this project. [Give the reasons why you can make a difference to this project and not the difference it can make to you.]

I thank you for your reading this letter.

If you have any questions, please contact me via e-mail. --- or my personal e-mail address ---

Best regards,

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xatso hi!
thank u for your time spent in correcting my letter and for all the suggestions that you've given to me. they have been very useful. expecially all this reformulated sentences that sound much better now:). I have poorly used english in past two years so I lost the 'touch'. and no, your comments aren't rude att all:), I'm grateful for your honesty. thx.
I know that this kind of letters are usually very formal cause I write them from time to time when applying for a job:). and my first version of this letter was pretty formal, but than I was thinking and... this is a kind of volunteering has for a gold collecting a group of various people (people are coming from all parts of the world), choosed by their nationalite, different cultures, gender, interests... and they are looking for someone who has to offer more with his/her personality and multiple interests than with his/her job skills. so I think that some parts that you find irrelevent aren't so irrelevent at all. things like - I also speak a bit of slovenian, a deaf-mute language, what kind of a dance I preforme and so on. also, this are people who are aware you're applying for their project mosty to learn language and to get some new experinces and knoledges. and it very important to underline how much you like working with people. I would like to express my personality with this letter, not only my job qualifacitions so I delibertly tryed to incorporate some kind of 'friendly talk'. but that's how I see it, probaly I went to far, I don't know, you still think I should write a strickly formal letter? that this kind of 'not so formal letter' would not pass very well? this is a first time I'm applyinfg for something like this, so I'm grateful for any advice.
thanks and i hope that I didn't sound rude this time:)