Hello,I need help with letter of motivation to University...I must write about why I want study there etc.I can write it short,but i need more words to discribe all about my wish to study...I hope u got me.
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Hello, obsession - and welcome to English Forums. You should not add filler to your letter just to make it longer.

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Yes, indeed! I must remember to include those links in future, MH. Good stuff!
Hello. I know what i must need to write,but i cant write it long as I must,its diffuclt for me to find,why I want to go this school etc.
obsessionHello. I know what i must need to write,but i cant write it long as I must,its diffuclt for me to find,why I want to go this school etc.
Obsesssion, we're not psychologists. We can't look into your soul to find your true passions and motivations.

You must look at the examples we provided. Then do your best to create your own version. Then, we'll try to help you.

Remember, this exercise is important to you. If it is important to you, then you'll put forward your best efforts.
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I understand u:),but I think maybe u have an example from letter of motivation who wanted study Politic or International Relations ?
Hello again:)

I wrote/tried a leter of motivation

Can u help me with this?

what I lack in this text, the errors I have, it should be longer than this?

When i was at an early age I wanted to study in England,learn english,learn more about the english people and tradition.This land was always interested for me,because I had heard so much about England,and I never been there before,so I looking forward it.I want to take Higher Education because it will give me the highest level of knowledge and good work in the future.

Since I was 16 years old I got interess for politics and history.I soon realized that in order to fully understand todays chaotic and globalized world.I started paying attention to everything that is related with politics,because Im grew up in war in Chechnya,before i came to Norway at 14 years old.So I know how it to live under the bombs.Then I decide that I must study politics,to learn how to control land and community.In my life I want to succeed in the political sphere and to bring to my country's some whatis the benefit .

So i did promise to myself to to someone who can influence in this life.

Education in England can help me with to know people from all countries and nations that will help me in life to find acommon theme with people of other countries.

I hope that my dream will come true is studying in England.
Obsession, because your life hasn't been easy, I will put in extra effort to help you. However, your first letter needs a lot of work. That is a kind way of saying your first letter was poor. If you want to study in England, your skills will need to improve.

When i was at an early age I wanted to study in England,learn english,learn more about the english people and tradition.This land was always interested for me,because I had heard so much about England,and I never been there before,so I looking forward it.I want to take Higher Education because it will give me the highest level of knowledge and good work in the future.

What do you want to study in England? Which university, which topics, subjects, material? What do you hope to be when you grow up?

Since I was 16 years old I got interess for politics and history.I soon realized that in order to fully understand todays chaotic and globalized world.I started paying attention to everything that is related with politics,because Im grew up in war in Chechnya,before i came to Norway at 14 years old.So I know how it to live under the bombs.Then I decide that I must study politics,to learn how to control land and community.In my life I want to succeed in the political sphere and to bring to my country's some whatis the benefit .

So i did promise to myself to to someone who can influence in this life.

I would change your earlier paragraph to something like...

I grew up in Chechnya, a former Soviet Republic that has seen more than its fair share of war, destruction and terror. At the young age of fourteen, I along with my family moved to Norway, a much more peaceful country. As I grew older, I reflected upon my life and my situation. At the age of sixteen, I became interested in history and politics. Because of my challenging upbringing, I want to learn X so that I can do Y. (You need to tell me more about X and Y.)

Education in England can help me with to know people from all countries and nations that will help me in life to find acommon theme with people of other countries.

I hope that my dream will come true is studying in England.

You don't say very much in that last paragraph.

To make your letter more effective, you need to tell the reader:

- If you are smart...show some evidence

- Your key strengths

- Your passions

- You motivations and ambitions

- Why England? There are lots of good and safe countries, including Norway.

Okay, you need to do some more work.
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