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Electronic Engineering Society
Tunku Abdul Rahman College
Penang Branch Campus
77, Lorong Lembah Permai Tiga,
Tanjung Bungah,
11200, Pulau Pinang.
Tel: xxx
Fax: xxx

Date: 2 December 2008

The Manager,

HT Manufacturing,
35, Western street,
12344, Pulau Pinang.

Dear Sir/Miss:

Permission For Factory Visit
As a secretary of electronic engineering society from Tunku Abdul Rahman college. I would like to enquire the permission for visit yours factory. The purpose of visit yours company is to observe the workings of an automated production line.

2. Regarding the factory visit, we suggest the factory visit will conduct on 1 February 2009 from 9am to 3pm. Beside we will have 30 student and lecturer will attend to your company to see the automated technology hat you are using in automated production line. Below are some the information that we need you to reply:

a. the possibility date and time is convenient?
b. isit the number of people/student is over?
c. the entire that we should wear?
d. Isit the taking Picture is allow?

3. our semester holiday will on 23 January to 8 February 2008. So I hope that you can reply before 23 January 2009.

You’re approved to visit the factory is highly appreciated

Yours sincerely,

As a secretary for the electronic engineering society from.....College, I would like to ask permission to visit your factory. The purpose would be to observe how an automated production line works.

If it is possible to visit, would it be feasible to visit on February 1, 2009 between 9 am and 3 pm? We would have 30 students observing. Would these dates and times be convenient? Would the number of people be acceptable? If we may visit, how should we dress? Would picture-taking be permitted?

Our semester holiday is 23 January to 8 February 2009, so if you could reply before 23 January that would be most helpful.

We would very much appreciate the opportunity to visit your factory.


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