Please help me to correct this essay....there are 3 aspects that need to be improven

1.grammar

2.vocabulary(as i consider that i have used a very poor vocabulary...taking in consideration that i want to participate in a contest with this essay...or should i give up?) so i would apreciate any adjustments that u make ..regarding grammar and vocabulary(that would express what i have written in a more creative and poetic way)

3.structure of the essay, font, size of the characters, margins...the essay must have maximum 400 words, but mine has 700 words because it was diffiult for me to sort out the most important things on this theme...so i'll ask u to help me see what would be the most important things that would count for the jury of the contest.

oh...i also can't succeed in finding a conclusion that would be appropriate.

thank you so much...my e-mail is if you wish to give me some advices

"My lifestyle-what i have and what i wish"



My essay will include the six components of wellness, that being Physical, Emotional, Intellectual, Spiritual, Interpersonal and Environmental wellness.It will include my goals, my weaknesses, as well as my strenghts to the components of wellness as well as a plan for myself to manage all of these components.

The first component of wellness that i’ll discuss is that of Physical wellness.My goals in this area is to have a healthy and active lifestyle. In order to do this I eat well, I do exercises in the evening, I avoid harmful habits like smoking and drinking. I also must improve on my weaknesses: I plan to learn to make decisions more responsible, learn more about diseases and how I can prevent them from happening and keep regular medical and such checkups.

Regarding the emotional wellness, the qualities that I posess are self-esteem, self-confidence, self-control, the ability to share feelings and satisfying relationships.The most important characters in my life, that give me the chance to experience a mix of feelings like love, affection, consideration and joy, are represented by my family and and my best friend. A barrier to my emotional well-being is that I tend to avoid and run away from conflicts rather than solving the problem. In order to vanish this barrier and develop my emotional abilities I take acting lessons, where I play with ideas, feelings and thoughts.I also volunteer for an organization that largely focuses on the plight of disadvantaged children in Romania and I this experience shows me that patience is very important, not just when taking care of kids but also in our everyday life. I have learned how to sort out the causes of sadness, frustration and anger in my life and that leads to a better manage of my emotional health. My goal in this area is to have each day overtuned with a lot of beautiful feelings and emotions.

A very important aspect of my lifestyle is developing interpersonal and social wellness that helps me bring the loving , supportive people I need in my life. For this I use my joviality, spontaneity, expressivity, good communication skills and sense of humor. I am very open to different religions, cultures, and practices because I know many people with different backgrounds and beliefs. I have learned never to judge people by the way they look, dress, feel or act. My weakness is that I not always succeed during a day to combine personal with social activities. I plan to diminish this weakness by a better manage of my time and including each day a social activity like going out with my friends, going to a theatre, opera, museum, club or just staying in the hostel and watch a movie or chatting with friends.

Intellectual self deals with memory, learning, problem solving, decision making and creativity. I am a visual learner which means that I learn best by seeing the information. Whenever I have a problem to solve, I usually draw a picture of the problem and draw a few possible solutions. This helps me to see and organize the problem more clearly. I like to combine spontaneity with a well-planned program that will have an end in achieving my goals.I think a good education provides the base for work skills&knowledge.This and the interest in cultural diversity constitutes the mobile for my desire of obtaining a master scholarship in Usa or Europe. I am a very competitive person, but I also like to work in team which allows me to learn more about my colleagues and me.My greatest goal in personal development area is to run my own business that will allow me to merge creativity with knowledge in economics and finance.

I believe that my spiritual self is my strongest self. One reason for this is because there can always be expectations of the intellectual self, emotional self, social self, and physical self, but there are no limits or expectations for the spiritual self. The spiritual self is mostly a feeling that doesn't need to be learned.I believe in God and that has helped me get through difficult times. I live by many life philosophies, but one of my favorites is "If you want a rainbow, you must put up with the rain". Other philosophies I believe are "Dream as you'll live forever. Live as you'll die today", "Whether you think you can or you think you can't, you're always right", "We are all angels with one wing, who can only fly when holding onto each other", and "It's nice to be important, but it's more important to be nice".
Sorry but as this is an essay for entering into a competition, it should be all your own work. It would be cheating if we were to help you.
ok, i understand, but could you tell me if i made many mistakes and if i could go in for the contest with this essay? i need an unbiased opinion, so please be sincere with me..and could you tell me where could i read about some tips of editing an essay(i'm concerning the font, characters, style, margins in page)?thank you