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The climate in almost every part of the planet has been changed considerably in the last century due to global warming. Experts predict that climate change will increase dramatically in the future. This essay will discuss causes and effects of global warming, and also propose a solution that can slow down the warming of the planet.

Global warming is largely caused by human activities, it presents a serious threat to the well-being of nature people. The major cause is pollution from industries, factories and cars produce a number of gases like carbon dioxide and carbon monoxide. Another significant reason is the population growth, humans emit gases every day, especially methane – a gas that retains heat the most. Therefore, they cause a large hole to form the ozone layer to allow ultraviolet rays to come through.

Global warming affects the existence of nature and all creatures on Earth including human beings. Not only the ultraviolet rays lead to increasing cases of skin cancer, but it also impacts rising temperature. Weather patterns are changing to be more draconic on a daily basis. Natural disasters such as drought, floods and fires would happen frequently and are extremely severe, even causing a catastrophe like La Nina and El Nino.

Despite these consequences, people ought to take steps to slow the effects of global warming. Since emissions are the major cause, new technologies should be innovated, cars will use hydrogen as fuel instead of fossil fuels, then these emit only pure water. Moreover, renewable energy sources as wind, water and solar power are also good alternatives because they do not release harmful emissions into the atmosphere.

All things considered, is caused by human activities and affects all living beings on Earth. However, it can be reduced if people change their habits and apply the solution, in this way, nature will be preserved.

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irresistible luvThe climate in almost every part of the planet has been changed considerably in the last century due to global warming.

That is a very poor statement, a fallacy called ""Begging the question." Global warming is nearly synonymous with climate change. So you basically wrote "The temperatures are higher because it is getting warmer."


The climate in almost every part of the planet has changed considerably in the last century due to human activities associated with the Industrial Age.

irresistible luvExperts predict that climate change will increase dramatically in the future.

Start to answer the essay prompt in the next sentence:

Most of the change is caused by greenhouse gasses, such as carbon dioxide, being released into the air. Experts predict that the earth's average temperature will keep going up, as we continue burning fossil fuels, resulting in drastic changes in the earth's climates.

irresistible luvThis essay will discuss causes and effects of global warming, and also propose a solution that can slow down the warming of the planet.

A thesis statement is much preferred over copying the task instructions into the first paragraph. The examiner knows the instructions. It is rather mundane just to parrot the instructions. Instead, write a thesis statement that addresses the task topic. Here is a rewrite of your paragraph that avoids the fallacy and gives a good start on cohesion and coherence for the essay.


The climate in almost every part of the planet has changed considerably in the last century due to human activities associated with the Industrial Age.  Mostly it is caused by millions of tons of greenhouse gasses, such as carbon dioxide, being released into the air. Experts predict that the earth's average temperature will keep going up as we continue to burn fossil fuels and cut down forests, resulting in disastrous changes in the earth's climates. There are many adverse effects of climate change, especially on the poorer countries, but there is one solution that will effectively avert the worst catastrophes. 

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irresistible luvGlobal warming is largely caused by human activities, it presents a serious threat to the well-being of nature people.

Global warming is largely caused by human activities, (Comma splice error) it presents a serious threat to the well-being of nature people. (That is not a good collocation.)

You make a lot of comma splice errors. Read this resource:

https://chompchomp.com/terms/commasplice.htm

irresistible luvThe major cause is pollution from industries, factories and cars produce a number of gases like carbon dioxide and carbon monoxide.

That is a bad (ungrammatical) sentence.

The major cause is pollution from industries, factories and cars. - That is a good, grammatical sentence.

produce a number of gases like carbon dioxide and carbon monoxide. - That clause has a verb 'produce" but no subject. It is not grammatical.

You need to study relative clauses. The relative pronoun is the subject of the verb.

The major cause is pollution from industries, factories and cars that produce a number of gases like carbon dioxide and carbon monoxide.

irresistible luvAnother significant reason is the population growth, humans emit gases every day, especially methane – a gas that retains heat the most.

Another significant reason is the population growth, (another comma splice error) humans (Do not use "humans" for "people" or "we.") emit gases every day, especially methane – a gas that retains heat the most.

irresistible luvTherefore, they cause a large hole to form the ozone layer to allow ultraviolet rays to come through.

That is scientifically misleading. Do not confuse the ozone hole with global warming. They are completely different!

Global warming is caused by the greenhouse effect - the greenhouse gasses convert the atmosphere into very warm blanket covering the earth. If you put another blanket on your bed, you will get warmer, won't you?

The hole in the ozone layer is a completely different concept. It is caused by chlorofluorohydrocarbons, not greenhouse gasses. And the "hole" is only over the south polar regions; it is not global.

Here is a good explanation.

https://earthathome.org/quick-faqs/does-the-ozone-hole-cause-global-warming/

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