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This is my first post (as well as my first IELTS essay). Thanks in advance!


It is often assumed that living in a country that utilises a language different to our native language can result in social and practical issues. However, I strongly disagree with this common belief.

Firstly, we, as humans, have amazing brain capacity and can learn any language, given that we put in the right amount of effort and practice. Therefore, learning a foreign language is no impossible feat, especially if there is constant, daily exposure to it. For example, albeit my family is Srilankan, my parents moved to Bangladesh where my parents were able to grasp the language within several months. Of course, fluency took much longer to achieve, but they knew enough of the language to be able to communicate on a daily basis without any social hurdles or practical discomforts.

Secondly, rather than living in a foreign country being a disadvantage, I have strong faith that it actually becomes a benefit. To expand on this, my father's bilingualism was extremely helpful as a General Manager in a company that had branches in both Sri Lanka and Bangladesh. Being able to fully comprehend and translate between the two languages gave him an upper hand when it came to ensuring smooth business.

In contrast, some people disagree that no matter how much effort is put into learning a foreign language, 100% fluency is impossible. Therefore, moving to a foreign country is strongly advised against. I believe this statement to be a weak argument, not just as someone who didn't grow up in my home country, but as someone who has seen numerous people learning to communicate with foreigners with no hurdles in delivery of their messages. One such person is my sister. She is fully capable of speaking 5 languages, including Chinese and Indian. 100% fluency might not be initially achievable, but such a high level of knowledge is not required in order to get messages across to the other party, to ask for medicine in case of an emergency, and to shop for groceries. In other words, it is not essential to surviving in a foreign country without practical and social obstacles.

To recapitulate, many believe living in a foreign country brings about several issues, socially as well as practically. However, I strongly disagree because such issues are fully avoidable given that the foreign language is learned, which in itself isn't an impossible task.

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You wrote almost 400 words.

The minimum is 250. You will not lose points for writing more; however, longer essays generally do not get high scores. There are many reasons.

First, the longer the essay, the more chances you have to make errors, and you will lose points for each of those errors.

Second, your writing may be repetitious and wordy. This will cost you points in task completion or coherence and cohesion.

Third, you will likely stray off-topic, and examiners will deduct points if you are not focused on the topic. You will also be tempted to use weak or unsound arguments or even contradict yourself. Develop just two or three argument points with examples.

Fourth, you will take a lot of time writing, and not have time left over to proofread your essay. You will miss the silly mistakes, and that lowers your score.

Fifth, you will not have enough time to spend on Task 1, and get a lower score there.

Aim to write around 270 words for Task 2. Practice writing a lot of essays so you get a feeling for the length.


It is often assumed that living in a country that utilises (Not a good word choice) a language different to our (

You need to have previously used "we" to match this pronoun. e.g.

It is often assumed that if we live in a country where the locals speak a language different from our native language, we can experience both social and practical problems.

) native language can result in social and practical issues. However, I strongly disagree with this common belief.

Firstly, First, we, as humans, have amazing brain capacity and can learn any language, given that we put in the right amount of effort and practice. Therefore, learning a foreign language is no impossible feat, especially if there is constant, daily exposure to it. For example, albeit my family is Srilankan and my parents moved to Bangladesh where my parents were able to grasp the language within several months. Of course, fluency took much longer to achieve, but they knew enough of the language to be able to communicate on a daily basis without any social hurdles or practical discomforts.

Secondly, Second, rather than living in a foreign country being a disadvantage, I have strong faith that it a (Do not write opinions in the body paragraphs. Write them in the opening and concluding paragraphs and support your statement with your argument points in the body paragraphs.) living in a foreign country actually becomes a benefit. To expand on this, my father's bilingualism was extremely helpful as a General Manager in a company that had branches in both Sri Lanka and Bangladesh. Being able to fully comprehend and translate between the two languages gave him an upper hand when it came to ensuring smooth business. Another example is my sister, who is fluent in five languages, ...

You repeat the same point here. Two body paragraphs are sufficient for IELTS Task 2. You can take the example from this third body paragraph and use it to strengthen either your first or second point.

In contrast, some people disagree that no matter how much effort is put into learning a foreign language, 100% fluency is impossible. Therefore, moving to a foreign country is strongly advised against. I believe this statement to be a weak argument, not just as someone who didn't grow up in my home country, but as someone who has seen numerous people learning to communicate with foreigners with no hurdles in delivery of their messages. One such person is my sister. She is fully capable of speaking 5 languages, including Chinese and Indian. 100% fluency might not be initially achievable, but such a high level of knowledge is not required in order to get messages across to the other party, to ask for medicine in case of an emergency, and to shop for groceries. In other words, it is not essential to surviving in a foreign country without practical and social obstacles.

To recapitulate, many believe living in a foreign country brings about several issues, socially as well as practically. However, I strongly disagree because such issues are fully avoidable given that the foreign language is learned, which in itself isn't (Do not use contractions in formal writing.) an impossible task.


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Subject: Please review my IELTS essay

Message body:


Topic:

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?


My essay:

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oh my gosh, I'm so sorry. I didn't even know this was a thing! Thank you so much for informing me and I apologize for any inconvenience.

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Thank you so much for your answer!!


I didn't realize I'd written so much, and you're right. I should cut it down since it gives more space for errors.


I appreciate the template. Looks like the one provided for me by my teacher (Body: reason 1, reason 2, contradicting reason) isn't what is widely accepted. I'll have to work on this more! Thanks again!