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Hello all, I was wondering what preposition I should use in this sentece.

The moon is the beacon of earth-bound navigators, and the forests are the seas for which it lights.

If you think the sentence would be better if I restructured it, please tell me.

Also, I was wondering how to punctuate/structure this sentence.

The moon - Its light has danced for eons across the celestial dreamscape.

I would really like the effect of saying "The Moon" and then preceding with the rest, but I wasn't sure how I punctuate it. (I used a dash; many people are liberal with their dash use, so I wasn't sure if it would be right to use one in this case.Emotion: wink )

Thanks.
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Hi liquidmidnight,

The moon - Its light has danced for eons across the celestial dreamscape.

You need to change your dash to an em dash. Some style guides will say use two dashes and no spaces.

The moon--Its light has danced for eons across the celestial dreamscape.

Others leave a space on both sides of the dash. Just be sure to be consistent throughout.

Hope this helps.

MountainHiker
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In the first sentence, is the moon a beacon for the earth-bound navigators or are the navigators a beacon for the moon? As the sentence stands, the prepostional phrase "of earth-bound navigators" modifies the noun beacon, telling that the navigators are the beacon for the moon. Did you mean "for earth-bound navigators?"

This is a beautiful sentence. I would personify Luna (the moon) by taking out the "it lights" and placing "she lights." That gets rid of the vague antecedent (it). I might even remove the comma and coordinate conjunction and place a semicolon:

Luna is the beacon for earth-bound navigators; the forests the seas for which she lights.