Hey all. First of all, I'd just like to say that for a school english assignment my class has been given the tastk of making up chapter 13 from the novel Lord of the Flies. I would love for you all to please critique mine and tell me how it is. I worked hard on this and I think it's pretty good. Thanks and I hope you all enjoy it. PS: Sorry for any major spelling errors.

Chapter 13 - The Journey Home

All the boys were eventually moved from the island to the cruiser after several trips back and forth using the cutter. For the most part the boys, exhausted and scared, remained quiet. Even Jack, for all his bravado at Castle Rock, didn't mumble a thing, and Roger sat with a blank look on his face.

When the boys got on board the Cruiser the Captain had them all washed and groomed and then fed them in the mess hall. Again, all the boys remained silent, but ate quickly, gorging themselves with fresh milk and bread. Jack and Ralph sat as far away from each other as possible, in the far corners of the room.

After lunch Jack and Ralph were taken to the Captain's office.

"So boys, what happened back there," the Captain asked.

"We were playing sir," replied Jack. He kept his head down as he spoke and was barely audible.

"Yes, that's what it was, a game," said Ralph. Even as he spoke he couldn't believe the words that were coming out.

"Well," said the Captain, "I want you to get some rest boys and we'll talk again later. I have a lot to tell you about home and most of it is not good news. But keep your chins up. We're British and the British never quit".

"Neither Jack nor Ralph made sense of this, but they were too exhausted to respond. Both boys were escorted back to their room and put into their respective beds. The Captain close the door and the lights went out. Jack spoke first.

"Ralph," Jack began slowly and solemnly in a whisper, "I'm..." He paused for a moment of silence and continued, "Sorry for what we... I did. I should have listened to you and P-Piggy." You were both right and tried to tell me, but I wouldn't listen".

Jack sniffed in the darkness of the room and Ralph searched for a way to respond to the apology. Eventually Ralph had though of a response.

"I accpet your apology Jack, but don't take all of the blame. It was my fault too. It was my fault things got out of proportion and I should have taken better charge of things, and not have been so harsh on you like I was. I should have been less demanding and more reasonable."

"Thank you Ralph. That means a lot to me. What do you suppose the Captain meant when he said most of it is not good news?" Jack asked Ralph.

Ralph began, "I'm not too sure, but I think home won't be quite like the home we once knew."

Jack pondered in silence to what Ralph had stated and didn't want to think of the chaos that might have happened while they were away.

Jack quickly said, "Good Ralph" to Ralph.

"Goodnight Jack," said Ralph with a yawn, and they were both asleep.

Ralph woke up in presumably the morning frightened, shaking uncontrollably, adn drenched in his own sweat after he experienced a horrid nightmare. The nightmare consisted of the series of events that had occurred on the island up until their rescue. This time however, instead of the Captain's head, there rested the head of the sow that jack and his tribe decapitated as an offering to the beast. All the naval crew too had the sow head in place of their own and with the same evil grin that decayed into Ralph's brain. Ralph looked over at Jack's bed and saw that it was empty. Ralph leaned up off of his bed.

"Hullo," Ralph scaredly cried out.

Ralph heard footsteps approaching, thinking it was Jack but instead, the Captain came into the room. Ralph was now reassured and began to calm down slightly. The Captain noticed Ralph was drenched with sweat and politely asked,

"Bad dream"

Ralph shook his head and asked, "Where is Jack"

The Captain looked at the empty bed and replied, "Oh yes, everyone is having breakfast now; would you like to join us and eat? You're probably hungry again".

Ralph who wanted to leave the empty, blank room replied, "Yes sir, but could I ask you a question."

The Captain, who didn't appear to be in any hurry, replied, "ANything you'd like son. I'll try my best to answer."

"Will home ever be the same again? What I mean is sir, is it the same as before we left adn became stranded," asked Ralph?

The Captain looked deeply into Ralph's eyes and sorrowfully answered, "Son, I'm going to have to not answer that right now, but I will tell you that you're safe as of right now. We'll talk about this later okay"?

Ralph didn't quite understand whta the Captian was trying to tell him, but Ralph shook his head and he and the Captain continued out of the room and down the corridors to the mess hall to have breakfast. Ralph entered the mess hall and saw that most of the other boys were conversing with one another and eating their fairly plain breakfast. There was most of the crew of the cruiser but they were finished eating, it appeared, and were supervising the boys. Once Ralph entered, he was handed a medium sized, falt tray, by a crew member that consisted of small packages of non-labeled materials and the only thing that was distinct on it was the milk in a pint shaped carton. The mess hall was as plain and simple as his quarters were adn Ralph thought he would have to get used to the scenery for the time being. The mess hall consisted of many tables, all very long and rectangular shaped.

Not wanting to sit wiht the others, Ralph spotted an empty table and proceeded towards it. As Ralph was slowly walking towards the table, he heard a faint voice calling his name and he stopped before sitting down. It was Samneric. They quickly rushed over to Ralph and joined him at ahte table. Samneric appeared to be civilized once again and were excited to see Ralph. Their hair was combed down like before they were on the island and they were dressed in the same clothing as ralph, which was supplied by the crew members of the ship when they boarded.

Samneric both said simultaneously, "Hullo Ralph," excited and obviously glad.

"Hullo Sam. Hullo Eric," Ralph replied blissfully.

As Ralph, Sam, and Eric sat down together at the table and began gorgin themselves once again, Ralph grew nervous as he had noticed that some of the boys were eyeing him adn the room became much quieter he had noticed when he entered. However, Ralph tried to ignore their presence and continued eating and conversing with Samneric. Once finished, he gave his tray to the crew member and sat back down to his and continued his conversation with Samneric.

After, the boys were each dismissed by tables and proceeded through teh corridors again; they were free to roam around the cruiser along with a crew members' permission and continued supervision. The crew member solemnly walked over to Ralph's talbe and said that Sam and Eric may leave, but Ralph must speak once again to the Captain. Ralph was escorted with a crew member through a different set of corridors and tiny hallways, all the same blank paint color and texture, making the journey back to his quarters nearly impossible without a guide. Eventually, Ralph found himself in a long and very tight corridor with a single door at the end. The crew member told Ralph that that was the Captain's quarters and to knock before he enters, and that he would wait outside for Ralph.

Ralph quietly said, "Thank you," to the crew member, his voice barely audible.

The crew member gave Ralph a slight nod of approval and Ralph began his way down the thin corridor. He stopped at the closed door and paused for a moment, took a deep breathe, let it escape his body, and nervously lifted his arm and proceeded to knock on the silver metal door. There was a long pause of silence and stillness but Ralph heard a few clanign adn clinging noisees and soon the door opened wiht a loud squeak. There inside was the Captain, who motioned with his arm that Ralph enter and sit down in the wooden chair in his quarters. The room appeared very unique from the rest of the rooms in the cruiser, mostly, its size which was much larger than the other rooms they had received. Its walls also had flamboyant and very crafty markings on it and signified almost luxury and comfort. Although there were no windows, the room had lights and it was easy to see, almost too bright. There was a large wooden desk with a chair in front of it and behind it in the middle of the room and behind the desk was a large map hung on the wall. The map had many markings on it in various colors, but Ralph noticed that red was the most common of the colors and it was often used in teh shape of an "X" or a circle on various parts of the mpa, most noticeably where larger cities were located. Ralph became a little hesitatn and his actions were slowed a little. The Captain gestured to Ralph again that he sit down in the seat in front of the desk adn Ralph did slowly and quietly. The Captian began muttering to himself and began to slowly close the door with a clangorous and jolting noise.

The Captain began to quietly walk over to the desk but he did not sit down; instead he remained standing straight and erect. He apperaed very nervous and Ralph could sense there was a problem and that the Captain was compensating and pondering deeply.

"Ralph," the Captain finally spoke, "I want you to tell me the truth about what had occurred on teh island. Please ralph, I know you are living in fear and I want to help you. That's why I'm here - to help".

Ralph searched for a response but all he could produce was, "Piggy".

Puzzled, the Captain replied, "Who is Piggy? Ralph, be honest with me. Who is he; is he on this cruiser"?

Ralph quivered a little and managed to exclaim, "Piggy was another boy on the island... he was killed by Roger"!

The Captain understood immediately as to why Ralph was hesitant and he asked, "You said there were two killed on the island, who was the other boy? Please Ralph, I understand what you've gone through and it's tough, but try to tell me".

Ralph began to tremble more and more and suddently shouted, "Simon," and he began to sob a little.

Reaching into his desk drawer, the Captain removed a handkerchief and handed it to Ralph. Ralph still continued to sob but after a few minutes was comfortable again and waited patiently for the Captain's questions and comments. The Captain then proceeded to ask Ralph how they came to be on the island, how they were dealing with eh circumstances, and what happened in resolution. Ralph continued to whimper but managed to finally once again ask the Captain his original question of what had become of the world while they were cast away on the island.

The Captain was motionless now and stood with a look of despair on his face. He then proceeded with a much deeper tone of voice, "Ralph," he paused and continued, "many things have occurred since you were cast away, so many that I don't even have time to tell you everything that happened".

Ralph was intrigued but knew that there was bad news to be heard by the Captain.

"Let me start at the beginning so you can fully understand why we had you sent off in a plance," The Captain began slowly and looked into Ralph's eyes for understanding. He paused for a moment of silence adn continued, "There has and still is a terrible misunderstanding tha thas occurred. The Allied and Axis Powers are at war once again, adn we are currently in World War III. As you might not have known, Nazism has affected Germany once again and this time they began producing nuclear weapons. We of the Allied Powers, grew fearful of this and our goernments held a secret meeting and came ot the conclusion that he start of another world war was inevitable so our governments agreed to evacuate all major cities of its children and protect you all from the harmful radiation that occurs after nuclear weapons detonate".

Ralph, unaware that htis was occurring before they had left on teh plane, was astonished but still remained controlled, listening to every word the Captain said.

"I am assuming the war began moments after your plane crashed on the island since your plane was most likely shot down, causing you to crash on the island and be marooned there. The Axis Powers began launching nuclear missiles across the world in hopes to destroy all governments, create mass hysteria and chaos to recreate their "superhuman" race once again after their collapsed economy as a result of World War II. The nuclear war was more than ten times the United States' detonation on Hiroshima and Nagasaka and all major cities have been reported as destroyed and contaminated wiht harmful radiation around the world. There is now no defined government in any known country because their capitals have been destroyed instantaneously by the explosions and the world is in chaos and confusion as to what to do".

Ralph became filled with dread adn sat silently in the room staring at the Captain.

Ralph asked, "What has become of home then, sir"

Nothing but silence filled the room now and in this silence, Ralph saw the Captain first rub his nose and attempt to discreetly wipe a tear away from his eye. ralph now became fully aware that there was no home for them and that there may never be a home again. In this silence, there became a sort of bonding between Ralph and the Captain adn a sort of understanding between the two. Ralph, still wondering what would become of the world, tried to draw away from the picture of the now destroyed world and wanted to know where they were heading on the cruiser.

"Where are you taking us," Ralph asked?

"Well," the Captain began again, "we are going to dock in southern England in a few days adn we will quickly escort you boys to board another plane in an unmarked airfield, and you will then proceed to head over seas to the Uniteed States, and stay in a refugee shelter there for the time begin until the radiation passes over and it's safe again to live in England's cities. It will be very dangerous but air raids should not be too much of a factor but just in case, keep watch. Also, the switch will have to be odne quickly becasue testings show that radiation spreads quickly adn is very harmful if exposed for long periods of time."

Ralph understood, stood up, and headed for the door. The Captain waved at Ralph adn smiled warmly at him.
"Take care Ralph," the Captain exclaimed, "And don't worry too much; things will become better soon I hope".

Ralph smiled at the Captain adn saidd, "Goodbye, sir. I hope we can talk again sometime".

The Captain said, "Okay, Ralph. Just send for me when you question something or are in need of my assistance; I'll be there for you to help you".

Ralph nodded in agreement with the Captain and left the Captain's quarters. He then met with the crew member outisde the doorway and was escorted by him to his quarters again where Ralph then rested again for the remainder of the day. He never spoke to anyone about what had occurred between him adn the Captain about what he had said, much to the other boys' disappointment, but he did speak of the refugee shelter in the United States that they will be taveling to by plane. The other boys became very ecstatic and overjoyed that they will be finally arriving on dry land in a few days and would hopefully be once again safe from harm.

Over the course of the next few days on teh cruiser, Ralph made periodic stops and continued from where their conversation had ended that he had with the Captain. Ralph had learned that most of the civilians that lived within the cities had been killed because fo the harmful radiation exposure and mainly due to the original bombings. There are no certificates certifying brith dates, records, or any sort of history. All libraries and buildings were destroyed and are now decaying in the ruble that they now are. Electricity is unusable now and hte Captain warned that their arrival will be very gloomly and depressing scenery so Ralph wouldn't be too overwhelmed.

All was safe on the cruiser and there had been no trouble with any misbehaved boys; even Roger was controlled now. All was quiet and contained in a well defined society.

During the next few days the procedure being done was pretty evident: wake up, eat breakfast in teh mess hall, have time to do as they wish aboard the cruiser, eat lunch; then, eat dinner later, and finally, go to sleep. The procedure was simple, yet efficeitn ot the boys and most enjoyed the sense of well-being and rules established. There was a sense of time and being now.

Days later, a voice was heard over the intercom of the Cruiser.

"Land ho," shouted the Captain.

Cheers were made throughotu the cruiser and the children rushed onto the deck of the cruiser.

"Steady now, boys. Remain calm and don't become too rambunctious," stated the Captain over the intercom.

Even teh crew members onboard took off their hats and cheered gleefully as the Cruiser began to decelerate adn lose speed. The littluns began to cry iwth joy but Ralph maintained solemnest and tried to peer inot the thick black smoke and debris in the air by squinting his eyes tightly. The Cruiser slowly to a halt and the crew members quickly and effectively jumped out onto the dock and tied the ropes onot the dock so the cruiser would not change course and remain in the correct position. The boys cheered as the boards were steadied and put off of the cruiser so they could all depart from the it. Ralph watched the crew of the ship and noticed they began to sob and were standing in despair and disapproaval of the sight that held before them. The boys soon departed from the cruiser and the dock was much less sturdy than it had appeared to have been. With every step taken, the dock shook, squeaked, and swayed from side to side.

The Captain emerged among teh crestfallen crew adn shouted, "Follow me boys" and the boys obeyed and proceeded.

Most of the crew and boys coughed adn wheezed from teh debris and radiation they were inhaling into their lungs and some needed to be helped by other crew members and boys volunteering. Ralph remained by the Captain's side as they walked in the midst of the radiation adn crushed rubble of what had appeared to have been the remains of a town which was now desereted, presumably, evacuated beforehand. The road was collapsed in and the buildings that remained stadning were missing their windows and remianed stained black and grey. It was apparent that this was the aftermath of a nuclear explosion but it was not affected quite so much either; it must have been more distant to the initial detonation.

"Keep up pace with me," exclaimed the Captian loudly.

THe children were awestruck adn in dismay. They remianed quiet and ovserved their surroundings while they continued walking in the rough terrain. Eventually, there became a clearing from the town, adn there rested an out of place airplane about 400 meters ahead of where they were walking.

"There it is," the Captain said., "That's the plane you will be flown in".

Ralph asked, "Are you going with us sir?"

"No," replied the Captain, "I will have to head back, but there are pilots and a medical team already waiting for you in the plane".

Ralph didn't reply and understood. They were appraoching the plane and were now about 350 meters until they would arrive and board it. The clouds overhead became darker and darker adn soon, a few moments later, a loud thunder was heard. It began to rain and soon the boys and remaining crew were soaked from the continuous rainfall. Suddenly, in the distance, there was a loud crack and a boom and the distant sound of buzzing and humming coming from the sky. As the strange buzzing and humming sound became louder, it was obvious something was approaching them. The Captain was oh too familiar with the sound and he looked dicouraged and full of awe and disbelief at teh sight that was before him.

"Christ no," muttered the Captain heart-wrenched.

The boys were now alllooking up into the dark and gloomy sky. The buzzing became more nad more rapid and much louder as each second passed. The sounds of enemy airplanes filled the sky and were heading to the destroyed town where the Captain, Ralph, and other children were located. The littluns screamed out and the other crew members began to become restless and fear was in their eyes.

The Captained shouted, "Run" and the boys and remaining crew began to sprint for their lives.

They were now about 300 meters away from the plane; although, it seemed much further and some of the littluns were falling behind and lagging Ralph noticed. Ralph remained instep with the Captian and Jack was now right behind tagging along. Ralph looked up into the sky and he could now see the planes much more clearly and it was evident they were much closer than he had thought. Screams were heard all from the littluns and there became total loss of control. Crew memers stopped and helped the littluns and boys back on their feet and most carried them while continuing the desperate sprint towards the plane.

The sounds of machine guns came into consideration nwo and more screams were heard from those who were hit from behind by the bullets. The sounds of moaning and desperation grew louder and louder as the planes were approaching the Captain, Ralph, Jack, adn the rest of the remaining crew, boys, and littluns.

They were now less than 100 meters away from the plane and the pilots already had the engine started strongly and was preparing for take off. Ralph peered over his shoulder and saw that many of the boys and crew law motionless on teh ground and if they weren't, they were screaming in agony and pain from teh stray bullets that had pierced their flesh. Another scream was heard next to Ralph as the bullets were once again fired adn Ralph quickly looked over and saw Jack ahd been struck by a bullet as well. Ralph quickly stopped and helped Jack onto his feet and they continued to run. Jack was bleeding profusely adn he was shot in his upper arm and his arm was nearly useless and only hung by Jack's side and swayed as they ran.

They continued to run and were now nearly boarding the plane. There were crew members standing beside the plane firing at the planes in an attempt to defend the remaining crew adn boys and were soon struck down one by one. Ralph shoved Jack up onto the stairs on teh plane as it began to slowly move. Jack managed to climb aboard with some of the otehr boys and littluns and the Captain and Ralph began to board after. More shots were fired and Ralph screamed in agony and pain as the stray bullets pierced his torso.

Ralph began to cry and started to breathe heavily as he began to slump to the ground with a thud that was barely heard of the screams and loud propellers of the planes. Ralph felt a hand on his body and he was slowly but strongly pulled onto the moving plane as he did nothing to help himself on board. The plane soon gained speed quickly and took off of the unmarked, dirt runway, and the enemy planes soon departed and headed bakc in the direction whence they came. Ralph opened his eyes and saw the Captain over him as he was being held in his arms.

"It's okay, you're going to make it," said the Captain with much worry and nervousness in his voice.

Ralph, still in much pain, looked into the Captain's eyes and proceeded to slowly shut his eyes in a hard squint as he moaned from the pain and torture of the bullets imbedded into his abdomen. Ralph looked at the Captain again and slowly turned his head and peered outside the small plaen windown and saw only one image: the Lord of the Flies staring back at him through the window and debris with the same evil grin. Ralph lay there for a few moments in the Captain's arms; then, slowly his head bobbed up and down without control, he soon collapsed and lay motionless in the Captain's arms. His breathing faded more and more with each deep breath took eventually became a wheeze. Soon, Ralph lay dead in teh Captain's arms, along with most of the other injured and dying crew membesr and boys inside the plane as it continued its' journey overseas to the refugee shelter.
hey i think this is a good esaay verv good idea, but how would the captain know jack and ralph were the people to ask what happened?
At the end of the book, i remember Ralph stated that 2 people had died to the captain. but what about the littlun that they never found in the beginning? oh and by the way, really good job!
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Although there were many spelling errors, I thought this was a good essay. I also thought the plot was good, but didn't match the rest of Lord of the Flies in any way, shape or form. I mean, nuclear war? Destruction of large cities?? World War 3??? Also, you didn't have any more charcter development. Good ending with Lord of the Flies, but maybe have some dialoge between them? Overall it was pretty good, but could have been better Emotion: nodding
To be honest, it was okay. I hope you got a good grade but I was a bit confused, because the world war three? This story was during world war two, but anyways, it seemed like a middle-school type of writing. There were many simple spelling errors, but the rest followed the story well, and some good vocab in there. Emotion: stick out tongue
No. The boys are from England, and if you look on page 14 it says, "Didn’t you hear what the pilot said? About the atom bomb?". Meaning that an atom bomb had gone off in England. However, the only atom bombs to ever go off in world history were in Japan. This means the book took place in a future war.
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I felt it didnt much reflect the style of William Golding. Your idea was good and overall it was generally good except for some spelling mistakes but I would definately try and maintain the style seen in the rest of the book. And one more thing, just a suggestion, I would kind of reverse the roles of Jack and Ralph at the end, I think Ralph should get hit first and have Jack try and save him to redeem his character instead of Ralph saving Jack. That will also give the impression that they have finally escaped from the Lord of the Flies (which was basically a metaphore for the darkness inside everyone). But thats just my suggestions. Overall, good job!Emotion: smile
Well because of the setting, it may just be the author's own writing, and it didn't have to be completely historically accurate. it's like an Alternate Universe Emotion: automobile If you will.
it was okay, but i feel like the characters weren't true to themselves. Jack and Ralph make up with each other only moments after rescue? I mean, this guy killed two of his best friends, not to mention tried to kill him also! Jack would not apologize so easily, and neither would Ralph accept his apology that quickly.
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