I have a story and I want to tell everybody !!! But My English is so bad, so I hope everyone corrects my mistakes.
The story begins:

It was the first time, I Made an appointment a girl. Before went to meeting place, I asked my father What did I say when I met her. My father said : "When talk to a girl, you should talk about 3 problems: first is food, Second is family, And third is the life"

She and me met in a romantic place with slow music. But both of us were motionless. I remembered my father's the first guiding. I asked her: " Do you like vegetable ?". But She still was motionless. Remembered my father's guiding, I asked her about the second problem: "Have you got brother ? ". She still was motionless. I really was embarrassed, But I still remembered my father's guiding. I asked her about the third problem: " If you had brother, would He like vegetable ?". What did she do after that....
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hi angel, its very nice!
can i correct your mistakes?
then here it is...
It was the first time, I TOOK an appointment WITH a girl. Before GOING to meeting place, I asked my father "What SHOULD I say when I meEt her"?. My father said : "When EVER YOU talk to a girl, you should talk about 3 problems: first is food, Second is family, And third is the life"

She and me(I?) met in a romantic place with slow music. But both of us were motionless. I remembered my father's ADVICE, the first ONE. I asked her: " Do you like vegetable ?". But She still was motionless. Remembered my father's ADVICE, I asked her about the second problem: "Have you got brother ? ". She still was motionless. I really was embarrassed, But I still remembered my father's guiding. I asked her about the third problem: " If you haVE A brother, WILL He like vegetable ?". What did she do after that...
nice one, keep writing , you write good!
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Thanks, I'll try my best !!!
ok deepa I'm going to add a littleEmotion: smile

It was the first time, I 'made an appointment a girl'

You could say: 'went out with a girl' . Oh and you don't need the comma as it is one sentance.
example: It was the first time I......

Before going to (the) meeting place, I asked my father what (I SHOULD say when I meet) her. My father said: "When TALKING to a girl, you should talk about 3 problems (or you could say 3 things): (The) first is food, (the) second is family, and (the) third is life."

She and I ( I still say me by the wayEmotion: wink ) met in a romatic place with slow music. Both of us were motionless. I remembered my fathers first words of guidance, I asked her
"do you like vegetableS?". But she was still motionless. REMEMBERING my father's guidance (you could say "remembering my father's guidance again), I asked her about the second (thing): "Have you got a brother (or: have you got brothers)". She was still motionless. I was really embarrassed, but I remembered my father's guidance.

I asked her about the third thing (ok just a personal thing you could say: but I remembered my father's guidance and so I decided to ask her about the third thing, life:) "If you had had A brother, would he like vegatables?". What did she do after that....?!?!?!?

What did she do after that?!?!?!? You must explain it to me!!!

hehehe, does any of that help?
It was my first date. Not knowing how to act or what to say, I asked the advice of my father. "When you talk to a girl, you should talk about three things: food, family, and life," he said.

She and I met in a romantic place. The music made it even more romantic. Neither of us knew what to say, so I took my father's advice. "Do you like vegatables?" I asked. No response. "Do you have a brother?" I went on. Still no response, which made me even more uncomfortable. After a long pause, I said, "If you had a brother, would he like vegetables?" This brought sadness to her eyes.

"I had a brother but he was killed in a car accident. I miss him very much . . .." she said.

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Now tell me about how her brother was killed, and about how difficult it has been for her to talk to anyone about it, about how she cannot mention his name in the presence of her parents, and then about how much she appreciates you for being such a good listener, as she says goodnight at her door and kisses you on the cheek.

By telling me about her brother's having being killed in an accident, you have "upset" my equilibrium. In order to restore that equilibrum, I want to know how he was killed. I will keep reading as long as my equilibrum is in flux.
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