The necessity of going to a university
Nowadays, many people think that should not waste of time in university. In contrast; in my view, who going to a college have expert mindsets and be intellectual. Therefore, I mostly do not agree that going to a university is a waste of time for reason.
To begin with, that is professional practices such as doctor, nurse, lawyer need an university degree. It is possible to become individuals motivation that assist students effort a lots to achieve desire of youself. Thus, learning in university is the most suitable way so that we gain more useful knowledge for works in the future.
However, others said that working as soon as graduated instead of spend more time in university, but it is not right. We have to consider finding any work without university degree is more complicated than be employed by recruiters. Anyways, we should spend time in a university to gain experiences.
To sum up, the university will give us challenges so that we effort a lots to build your own perfect future. Consequently, going to a university must not have spent time that is the best chance in your life.
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Nowadays, many people think that [ should not waste of time in university] (The verb "should waste" has no subject. The sentence is not grammatically correct.) . In contrast; (wrong punctuation) in my view, who going ("going" is not a full verb. and "Who" is used for questions. But your sentence is not asking any question. This sentence is not grammatically correct.) to a college have expert mindsets and be (wrong verb form. "Be" is irregular. I am, you are, he is...) intellectual. Therefore, I mostly do not agree that going to a university is a waste of time. (end of the sentence.) for reason.
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Nowadays, many people think that they should not waste time studying for four years in university. However, I disagree. In my view, those who go to college are smart and they are well rewarded for their hard work.
To begin with, that is professional practices (That is not grammatical English.) such as doctor, nurse, lawyer (ungrammatical. Missing conjunction) need an (wrong word) university degree. It is possible to become individuals motivation that assist students effort a lots to achieve desire of youself. (That is pure nonsense - there is no meaning in those words together. I have no idea what you want to say.) Thus, learning in university is the most suitable way so that we gain more useful knowledge for works (wrong form - work is non-count) in the future.
To begin with, professionals such as doctors, nurses and lawyers need to get a university degree so they can be qualified to practice. Thus, learning in university is the most suitable way to get qualifications leading to a high-paying job. Also we gain useful knowledge for any kind of work in the future.
However, others said that working as soon as graduated instead of spend more time in university, but it is not right. We have to consider finding any work without a university degree is more complicated than be employed by recruiters. Anyways, we should spend time in a university to gain experiences.
Others say that high school graduates should get a job as soon as possible and not apply for tertiary education. However, that is not good advice. We have to consider that finding a decent job is much more difficult if one does not have a university degree. Job postings nearly always require it. Besides, university is a wonderful place to gain experiences and make life-long friends.
To sum up, the university will give us challenges so that we effort a lots to build your own perfect future. Consequently, going to a university must not have spent time that is the best chance in your life.
To sum up, getting a university education will challenge us to put in a lot of effort and work, but it will build for us a perfect future. Consequently, going to a university is not a waste of time at all; it will be the best experience in your life.