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I have enjoyed studying mathematics for five years. Since I was in elementary grade 3, my math teacher has enlightened my talent. At first, I didn't do well at math thinking, so I had no confidence on math. However, my family and my friends encouraged me to make persistent efforts. So, I supported myself and accepted my teacher's instruction with an open mind. Eventually, I made a great progress and won some math contests. If I have the ability, I want it to be my future job because it's a challenging and interesting job which I like.
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I have enjoyed studying mathematics for five years. Since I was in elementary grade 3, my math teacher has enlightened my talent. At first, I didn't do well at math thinking, so I had no confidence on math. However, my family and my friends encouraged me to make persistent efforts. So, I supported myself and accepted my teacher's instruction with an open mind. Eventually, I made a great progress and won some math contests. If I have the ability, I want it to be my future job because it's a challenging and interesting job which I like.
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