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I have an English teacher who thinks she is the creator of syntax and semantics when holding a pen. In her eyes, there is only way to do everything: her way. Questioning her is out of the question because “[she] has two degrees and a master’s!” So I often find myself sitting back and laughing at her ignorance, especially since she claims that she’s “really good a writing papers.”

Here a few “corrections” that she made on my latest paper. I’d like to know the opinion of anybody qualified. (1) Will stand for my sentence, and (2) will stand for the “corrected” sentence.

1) This statement if especially special because I figure that most rock stars…

2) This statement if especially special, because I figure that most rock stars…

1) …a place in which there were no waterfalls, trees, or even…

2) **she writes, “No = no-no.”

1) I made sure to go to bed extra early the night before – nothing was going to get in my way of fun!

2) I made sure to go to bed extra early the night before. Nothing was going to get in my way of fun!

1) Then, as a gentle breeze caressed my face, a miracle happened: I heard the clank that signaled the end of the job.

2) 2) Then, as a gentle breeze caressed my face, a miracle happened; I heard the clank that signaled the end of the job.

Thanks for any comments.

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I'm more surprised that she didn't object to especially special! It's common to but a comma before a conjunction that joins two independent clauses. In the negative, the comma makes a semantic difference. I think it's good style to include it.

I don't know why she objected to "there were no trees." Perhaps she thinks "there weren't any trees" is better. I don't agree with her correction on this one.

She must have felt that a dash was too informal for the writing. That's also a style thing. I uses dashes all the time, but it depends on the formality of the writing.

I completely disagree with her on this one. Your use of the colon was correct.

However, she may be picking up on the disdain you feel for her, and as a results, shemay be taking extra pains over your work. I would be careful about "laughing at her ignorance" too much. You may not agree with her style choices, but she's the one with the grade book.
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I'm with GG. This is how I would have put it:

1. This statement is especially special, because I figure that most rock stars…

2. …a place in which there were no waterfalls, trees, or even…

[i.e. no change. What was the third thing that there wasn't, out of interest?]

3. I made sure I went to bed extra early the night before – nothing was going to get in the way of my fun!

[But the teacher's version with the full stop is also fine; it has a more "determined" air than the "dash" version. I hesitate to ask why going to bed early was going to involve fun.]

4. Then, as a gentle breeze caressed my face, a miracle happened: I heard the clank that signaled the end of the job.

[However, she should have marked you down 10 points for "gentle breeze caressed".]

MrP