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hello all ,

I wrote an essay from a graph and I am sure it is full of mistakes could you plz help me to find them?

I should notice that I omit the name of countries here.

"The chart below shows the differences of imprisonment between 1930 and 1980

Statistics comparison is illustrated in five different countries according to their number of people who are in the jail.

It can be clearly seen that there are a quit different pattern in each year. (name of a country) is about 30 in thousands in 1930 and 1940 And it reached to 80 in thousands in 1970 the same as (name of country) .

In 1980 it had a raise again about 90 in thousands.

Over the same period, (....) had variety increases and decreases. In 1930,(....) was about 70 in thousands, but it had a fall about 20 in thousands during 1940 and 1950. Then it had increase again and reach to 80 in 1970. in 1980, (...) returns to 50 such as 1940 and 1950.

(....) had it's larger number of imprisonment in 1930 exactly 100 in thousands. Although (...) had an incredible fall during 1940 and 1950, it had enhancement during following years.

During the same years, .... Was respectfully; 100,130,110,100,80 and 140 in thousand. The most statistics of imprisonment in ... happened in 1980.

The last caunty which examind in this table ,.... Was 120 in thousands in the first year. Then in 1940 it had a negligible increase about 10 in thousands. After that had radically fall until 1970 that reached to 80.

Then the trend was toward 90 in thousands in the last year.

This table expresses that ... and .... Respectfully had the largest number of imprisonment. .... Reached to a peak in 1980 of 140 in thousands. The lowest statistics devoted to 1930 in .....
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hello all , I wrote an essay from a graph and I am sure it is full of mistakes could you plz help me to find them? I should notice that I omit the name of countries here.

"The chart below shows the differences of imprisonment between 1930 and 1980 Statistics comparison is illustrated in five different countries according to their number of people who are in the jail.

It can be clearly seen that there are a quit different pattern in each year. (A.name of a country) is about 30 in thousands in 1930 and 1940 And it reached to 80 in thousands in 1970 the same as (A..name of country) . In 1980 it had a raise again about 90 in thousands.

Over the same period, (.B...) had variety increases and decreases. In 1930,(B....) was about 70 in thousands, but it had a fall about 20 in thousands during 1940 and 1950. Then it had increase again and reach to 80 in 1970. in 1980, (B...) returns to 50 such as 1940 and 1950.

(.C.) had it's larger number of imprisonment in 1930 exactly 100 in thousands. Although (.C..) had an incredible fall during 1940 and 1950, it had enhancement during following years.

During the same years, (D..) Was respectfully; 100,130,110,100,80 and 140 in thousand. The most statistics of imprisonment in *(D...) happened in 1980.

The last caunty which examind in this table (E,..) Was 120 in thousands in the first year. Then in 1940 it had a negligible increase about 10 in thousands. After that had radically fall until 1970 that reached to 80. Then the trend was toward 90 in thousands in the last year.

This table expresses that(E ...) and(D) .. Respectfully had the largest number of imprisonment. .. Reached to a peak in 1980 of 140 in thousands. The lowest statistics devoted to 1930 in(A..)
Hello.

this is my correction. but i need someone see mine too!!!!

1- statistics compares five countries.....

2-there quit different

3- then it increased and reached to 80( i think it had increase again is not quite correct.)

4-it had enhancement is wrong you should write it entensified or it hads a growth of...

5- the table expresses should be changed to the table illustrates/demonstrates/shows

need othrs ideas