Can someone please proof this for grammar or punctuation errors.... im sure there are some...thanks a whole lot!!!Emotion: big smile

Could the Holocaust have been prevented?

Outline

Thesis: The Holocaust, like most travesties, is a disaster that could have been avoided had valid

information been recognized or had the uprising of a tyrannous ruler with a dangerous

past come to a halt before reaching massive havoc.

I. Many argue that an event like the Holocaust was bound to happen following the chaos

and the desire for change that World War II brought with it.

A. Adolf Hitler’s childhood obsession with battles and the German nation, despite

his Austrian decent, later became the foundation for his fantasy of having a

dominant Aryan race (Wikipedia).

1. With the leader of one of the most powerful nations at the time possessing such an

extensive history of thoughts of war and mischief, it is possible that the Holocaust

was inevitable.

2. However, if such a deduction were made, then it would be only reasonable to

assume that every young delinquent of the current generation will develop into a

mass murderer as well.

B. The death of Hitler’s mother created a vengeful fire within him and one doctor said

that “in all [his] career, [he] had never seen anyone so prostrate with grief as Adolf

Hitler” (Dr. Bloch).
Hi,

I've high-lighted some areas you need to look at and correct.

Best wishes, Clive

Could the Holocaust have been prevented?

Outline

Thesis: The Holocaust, like most travesties I believe you mean 'tragedies', is a disaster that could have been avoided had valid information been recognized or had the uprising of a tyrannous ruler with a dangerous past come to a halt before reaching massive havoc.

I. Many argue that an event like the Holocaust was bound to happen following the chaos and the desire for change that World War II brought with it.

A. Adolf Hitler’s childhood obsession with battles and the German nation, despite his Austrian decent, later became the foundation for his fantasy of having a dominant Aryan race (Wikipedia).

1. With the leader of one of the most powerful nations at the time possessing such an extensive history of thoughts of war and mischief, it is possible that the Holocaust was inevitable.

2. However, if such a deduction were made, then it would be only reasonable to assume that every young delinquent of the current generation will develop into a mass murderer as well.

B. The death of Hitler’s mother created a vengeful fire within him and one doctor said that “in all [his] career, [he] had never seen anyone so prostrate with grief as Adolf Hitler” (Dr. Bloch).

Best wishes, Clive
I want to know if the word western should be written here with the capital leeter or not.here is the sentence:

I looked at the western sky.

and here is another question;should i put comma before as in this sentence?

here is the sentence;

Mother shouted as she left the room.

thanks

Anna
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Hi,

I want to know if the word western should be written here with the capital leeter or not.here is the sentence:

I looked at the western sky. You dpn't need a capital.

and here is another question;should i put comma before as in this sentence?

here is the sentence;

Mother shouted as she left the room. You don't need a comma, although it wouldn't be wrong if you put one.

There are other places in what you wrote in which you need a capital letter, to make it correct English. Can you find these places?

Best wishes, Clive