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Hello ! I want to apply to Sport Management course and I would like your help with my motivation letter. I spent hours surfing this site and trying to write the letter. It's my first motivation letter and English is not my first language.

So, please, take a look at my letter and check any grammar mistakes or some things that don't sound good in English. I'll be thankful for all your comments.

Dear Sir or Madam

I am writing to apply for the Sport Management course at Coventry University starting in September 2012.

My dream is to become a football agent. I started looking for universities where I could make my dream come true and Coventry looks like an excellent place to study.

There are several reasons for my interest in studying in England. First of all I would like to do something challenging and adventurous, and I would like to see more of the world. Secondly studying in England would give me the opportunity to meet new people with different backgrounds, and work together with people from different cultures. It would give me an unique experience to live in another environment and to gain more independence.

My key strengths are that I am determined, independent, hard-working, I adapt to new situations quickly and I am a team leader. I consider myself a team leader because I was the captain of the local football club for 6 years. I have also helped my school football team to become the county champions twice in the past three years. I said that I am determined because I always give 100 percent, at school and also at the football pitch, I don't like losing and I don't like giving up. I have represented my school at history and sports olympiads. The olympiad team consists of 4 members and our school is ranked top 3 in the county.

There are other schools that teach Sport Management, but honestly, as soon as I saw Coventry University, I realized that this is the place where I want to be. After finding this school I started to look for more information and I found a lot of very positive reviews. After a lot of reading, I looked at the pictures and I have to say that the school and the surroundings look magnificent. The icing on the cake was that this place is very safe for a student.

It's been my dream to live in england ever since I was a little kid. I know that the sports industry is highly competitive, but I also know that if I work hard and believe in myself then nothing is impossible.

Thank you very much for considering my application. I look forward to hearing from you

Yours Sincerely
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Ivo IdeonIt would give me an unique experience to live
It would give me a unique experience ....

[There are other corrections I want to make for you, but as I'm still unfamiliar with posting in this website, I'll do so separately.]
Ivo IdeonThere are several reasons for my interest in studying in England. First of all I would like to do something challenging and adventurous, and I would like to see more of the world. Secondly studying in England would give me the opportunity to meet new people with different backgrounds, and work together with people from different cultures. It would give me an unique experience to live in another environment and to gain more independence.

My key strengths are that I am determined, independent, hard-working, I adapt to new situations quickly and I am a team leader. I consider myself a team leader because I was the captain of the local football club for 6 years. I have also helped my school football team to become the county champions twice in the past three years. I said that I am determined because I always give 100 percent, at school and also at the football pitch, I don't like losing and I don't like giving up. I have represented my school at history and sports olympiads. The olympiad team consists of 4 members and our school is ranked top 3 in the county.

There are other schools that teach Sport Management, but honestly, as soon as I saw Coventry University, I realized that this is the place where I want to be. After finding this school I started to look for more information and I found a lot of very positive reviews. After a lot of reading, I looked at the pictures and I have to say that the school and the surroundings look magnificent. The icing on the cake was that this place is very safe for a student.

It's been my dream to live in england ever since I was a little kid. I know that the sports industry is highly competitive, but I also know that if I work hard and believe in myself then nothing is impossible.

Thank you very much for considering my application. I look forward to hearing from you
First of all, ...... (fill in comma)
Secondly, ..... (fill in comma)

My key strengths are that I am determinde, independent and hard-working. I adapt to new situations quickly, and consider myself to be a team leader. I was the captain of the local ....

Take out 'I said that I am determined' and replace it with 'My reason for stating that I am determined is because I always give 100 percent. At school, and also on the football pitch, .... .'

I would take out 'honestly' - therefore, your sentence would read : 'There are other schools that teach ...... , but, as soon as I saw ........

''After coming across your University, I started to look for ........''.

''I look forward to hearing from you as soon as possible.''
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Thank you very much. I made the corrections. If any other suggestion comes up, then let me know. I really want to make this letter as strong as possible
Thank you for helping. I made the corrections, If there are any other suggestions that would make my letter stronger then let me know.
you must not put i always, make it convincing
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