Here is my motivation letter to apply for a scholarship as a graduated student. The dead line is in January 15th. That means that I have just 1 weeks to finish it. I, therefore, will really appreciate if some one can take a look at it and help me a little bit to make better. Your comment will help me a lot in improving my writing skill. Thanks all of you in advance.

Merry Xmas and Happy New Year to all,

Dang

Dear Sir, Madam:

My name is ... With this letter, I would kindly like to introduce my candidature as a graduated student of the University of Natural Sciences, Vietnam National University of Ho Chi Minh City, Viet Nam, who is applying for the Mundus Programme.

I have studied the biotechnology at the University of Natural Sciences from 2001 to 2005 and acquired a bachelor of biotechnology last October. During the four years university-life, I was imparted plenty of biotechnological knowledge, including microbiology, molecular biology, genomic engineering, plant, animal, environmental and medical biotechnology and many subjects on agricultural biotechnology in the 4th year. However, I was tremendously interested in researches related to agricultural biotechnology, especially plant biotechnology and the micropropagation of the flower plants. Hence, I have decided to do a research on the micropropagation of an endemic slipper orchid of Viet Nam as my dissertation thesis. During the time doing this research, I was trained to be a prospective scientist who is familiar with doing research and working in laboratory and able to work individually or at team work. I have always endeavored to upgrade my education in the field of plant biotechnology by approaching to some novel method and protocol for plant propagation when taking part in some other researches under the instruction of my supervisor. However, through work in the plant biotechnology dealing with micropropagation problems, I came to recognize that my knowledge is still limited in many areas and I did know that people can study more than micropropagation with plant and agricultural biotechnology. Therefore, I plant to further an advanced study of plant biotechnology and agricultural management to learn more and also to put my knowledge into a higher standard, so that I could be a well-equipped and professional researcher.

After a thorough research of the Agri Mundus programme, I became aware that my knowledge of agricultural and horticultural crop management will be improved if I have an opportunity to enroll in this master course. This top-level programme will provide me plenty of knowledge in the field of agricultural development and horticultural crop management which can be very useful for my future carrier. In addition, working and attending this master course, I can meet different kind of people and culture that will give me different points of view, thus, contributing for my flexibility and creativity, besides the cultural and language gains. Moreover, I have come to recognize that I can obtain a deep and solid education in order to solve the diverse types of agricultural problems and to have a critical understanding of problems and solutions that my country is facing while I attend this course.

Personally, I am a person with a high perseverance level, someone who is motivated and ambitious. My teacher and supervisor know me as a courteous and resourceful student and my classmates know me as a light-hearted friend and an enthusiasm coworker. Furthermore, with my good command in writing and speaking English and French, I will not have to come up against any difficulties in studying scientific subject taught in English and French. Moreover, with my skill of taking part in many social volunteer activities and working with foreigners, I would be able to adapt to a constantly changing work environment, and also establish and maintain good working relationship with individuals of different culture backgrounds in the Programme of Agri Mundus.

To me, as a young female prospective researcher, it is my dream to devote a part of my life to the development of the Biotechnology in my country. My Viet Nam country is still an underdevelopment one, the Government has considered the goal of biotechnology development until 2020 is a significant and urgent tenor for the Country’s industrialization and modernization. Therefore, if I can be enabled to make a good course at the Agri Mundus Programme and make practical use of the knowledge I can gather throughout this Programme, I can be considered as a well-trained researcher which can be my advantage to lead a group of researchers in the future. With my skill, knowledge and experiences, I could do more than an ordinary scientist. Throughout my scientific achievements, I want to demonstrate with the world that the Vietnamese can do more than a soldier in a war; they are also good at learning, researching, applying and achieving novel scientific achievements.

I do hope that by my above-motivation words, I will be accepted as an applicant and a beneficiary of the Eramus Mundus Scholarship to study the Agri Mundus Programme in the 2006 – 2007 academic years. I understand that admission to the Eramus Mundus Scholarship is competitive, but I also understand that I’m qualified, eager and prepared to meet all of the challenges I will be presented with. I, therefore, would be most grateful if you could give my application form in your most favorable consideration.
Hello, Dang. Overall, it is good, but much too wordy, so I have removed the unnecessary parts:

Dear Sir or Madam:

My name is .... With this letter, I would like to apply as a graduate student in the Mundus Programme at the University of Natural Sciences.

I studied biotechnology at the University of Natural Sciences from 2001 to 2005 and acquired a Bachelor of Biotechnology last October. During those four years, I studied microbiology, molecular biology, genomic engineering, plant, animal, environmental and medical biotechnology, as well as several subjects in agricultural biotechnology in the fourth year.

I am particularly interested in research related to agricultural biotechnology, especially plant biotechnology and the micropropagation of the flowering plants, and I did research on the micropropagation of an endemic Vietnamese slipper orchid for my thesis. During this research, I was trained to be a laboratory scientist, and to work individually or with a team. I have endeavored to upgrade my education by using new methods and protocol for plant propagation when taking part in research under the instruction of my supervisor. However, through work dealing with micropropagation problems, I came to recognize that my knowledge is still limited in many areas. Therefore, I plan further study of plant biotechnology and agricultural management, so that I can be a well-equipped and professional researcher.

I would like to have the opportunity to enroll in your master's course, the Agri Mundus programme. This top-level programme will provide me advanced knowledge in the fields of agricultural development and horticultural crop management. In addition, I will have the opportunity to meet different people from different cultures, offering me different points of view and contributing to my flexibility and creativity. Moreover, I have come to realize that a deep and solid education is needed to have a critical understanding of the problems that my country is facing and their solutions.

Personally, I am a perseverant person, someone who is motivated and ambitious. My teachers and supervisors know me as a courteous and resourceful student, and my classmates know me as a pleasant friend and an enthusiastic coworker. With my good command of English and French, I will not have difficulty in studying subjects taught in those languages. I have also taken part in many social volunteer activities and worked with foreigners, so I am able to adapt to a constantly changing work environment and maintain good working relationships with individuals of different cultural backgrounds .

To me, as a young female prospective researcher, it is my dream to devote a part of my life to the development of biotechnology in my country. Viet Nam is still an underdeveloped, and the government has considered the goal of biotechnological development through 2020 as a significant and urgent corequisite for the country’s industrialization and modernization. Therefore, if I successfully graduate from the Agri Mundus programme and make practical use of what I have learned, I may be able to lead a group of researchers in the future. Through scientific achievement, I want to demonstrate to the world that the Vietnamese can do more than be good soldiers in war; we are also good at learning, research and scientific innovation.

I hope that I will be accepted as an applicant and a beneficiary of the Eramus Mundus Scholarship to study in the Agri Mundus Programme in the 2006 – 2007 academic years. I understand that admission to the Eramus Mundus Scholarship is competitive, but I am also confident that I'm qualified and eager, and prepared to meet all of its challenges. I would be most grateful if you could give my application your most favorable consideration.

Yours faithfully,

(Good luck on your application-- MM)
Hi Mister Micawber,

Thank you very much for your reply and your attentive correction. Yeap, you are quite right that my letter is too wordy, I am trying to express all my idea in a complete and accurate way, but it seems that I’m trying to make the reader fall asleep with my letter :<. So, I will try to modified it soon, and I hope that you still can help me check it. Thank you very much in advance.

Best regards from Viet Nam,

Dang
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Hello Little Bear,

I am looking for some motivation letter sample, and luckily i have found yours. Thank you so much for sharing this letter.

By the way, it seems that your motivation letter was posted many years already and i am wondering if you got the scholarship or not? and did you return back to Vn?

Anyway, nice to know you and good luck!!

Anh Tuyet
thanks for the sample. by hte way i was wondering if you got scholorship or not?? and did you returned to vietnam??