Could you please check my motivation letter. Thank you very much!


I am writing with reference to the possibility of obtaining work experience within the ***. Currently, I am studying International Business Administration and International Development. I will start to write my diploma thesis relating to my economic studies next semester and complete the first part of my studies of International Development at the end of this semester. During my time at university I gained a great theoretical and practical insight into both, business affaires and questions of development. I evolved a clearer understanding of the complex interrelations of globalisation and the different consequences worldwide.

I am fully proficient in modern communication media such as Word, Excel, Access, PowerPoint, Outlook and the two operating systems Windows and Linux. I speak English fluently and I also master two other languages: French and Russian.

As you can see from my CV, I can offer a considerable amount of relevant work experience. In July 2006 I completed an internship at *** (an organisation for fair traded carpets) and supported the institution in holding the ** event. Furthermore I updated the internal database. In August 2007 I volunteered at *** (an organisation for counselling, education and support for migrant women) at which I took over office work as well as vocational counselling of some clients. Please find enclosed the two letters of recommendations.

As the studies of International Development are highly concentrated on research work and scientific practice I am confident that I will be a great support for your team. Such an internship would provide me with the ideal opportunity to enhance my knowledge in the field of development cooperation. Probably I will also be given an idea about a subject for my diploma thesis.

Please have a look at my CV which provides further personal details. If you should have any questions, please do not hesitate to contact me by phone or email. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours sincerely,
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Beware the dangers of verbosity. I am unfamiliar with the phrase 'fair-traded' but presume it is a word familiar to those in the import-export business..

I am writing about the possibility of obtaining work experience within the ***. Currently, I am studying International Business Administration and International Development. I will begin my diploma thesis for my economic studies next semester and complete the first part of my studies of International Development at the end of this semester. At university, I have gained insight into business affairs and questions of development and gained a clearer understanding of the complex interrelations of globalisation and its consequences.

I am proficient in Word, Excel, Access, PowerPoint, Outlook and the two operating systems, Windows and Linux. I speak English fluently and have also mastered French and Russian.

I can offer considerable relevant work experience. In July 2006, I completed an internship at *** (an organisation for fair-traded carpets) and helped hold the ** event. I also updated their internal database. In August 2007, I volunteered at *** (an organisation for counselling, education and support for migrant women), where I did office work and vocational counselling of some clients. Please find enclosed the two letters of recommendation.

As studies of International Development concentrate on scientific research and practice, I can be a great support for your team. An internship would provide me with the ideal opportunity to enhance my knowledge in the field of development cooperation and may even provide me with a thesis topic for my diploma.

I enclose my CV, which provides further personal details. If you have any questions, please contact me by phone or email. I am looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours sincerely,
Thanks very much!
What I don't understand is: I have also mastered French and Russian. It sounds like I had exams about it. I wanted to say, that I can also speak these two languages. Is it still the same?