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Dear All,

I'm about to apply for phd position and I really appreciate every comment that can help me improve my letter.

Dear Ms. XXI appreciate this opportunity to introduce myself and support my application for the XX offered by XX position. With my educational background and working experience, I strongly believe that I am suitable applicant for this program and very enthusiastic for this role.Creativity is the key word of what I am looking for in my studies as well as in my career. During my Bachelor, I was always impressed about programming and how we could solve problems by writing some our own algorithms which requires a lot of thinking outside the box. And as Data analyst, I was always fascinated of how I could have a wide range of data which I could outline customer behavior, analyze business KPI, and evaluate traffic trend which was not a daily routine tasks I had to deal with different data sets from different departments and I had to come up with the best and suitable way to present my data insights. Choosing to be a Data Scientist was a combination of both my study and work experience background.My Master at Bologna Business School gave me an opportunity to gain more knowledge in area of Data Mining, performance management, Statistics, and big Data Analytical. As part of my master I had to do 500 hours of internship which I have done at XXX at Big Data and Analytics Competence Centre in XX. As an intern my assignment was to develop Recommender System for real estate belonging, which involve three main steps: Pre-processing and cleaning data, finding and implementing models to impute NA and since Data are crucial for a good Recommending System, Therefore, we Introduce two Machine learning models (Generalized Low Rank Model & Deep -Learning with auto-encoder) implemented in H2O package, finally applying scoring formula for ranking the houses which resulted in presenting new scoring formula based on Lucene Similarity. The project is pilot implemented at XXX considering the main technology used H2O was first implemented across the company which is new Technology. Also I present the work at Pycon9 in Florence 21st April 2018.Being a leader as a woman is really challenging in my society. However, my educational path was one of the first reasons to believe more in myself as a leader. At age 18, I had to decide to choose my major at university and as most of the students at that age, you have either to follow your parent’s decision, society view of best major, or to choose what you like the most(which is the hardest in my society). And I chose the latter one at that time it was a big decision for me to fight my parent and society welling and study what I like. I lead many successful projects at university which involved different students from different background and ages. One of the main projects that I lead at the university level was participating in the xx competition among 7 universities all over xx to come up with E-business idea and we got the 1st place award. Another unique experience that I had while I was at university was getting selected in xxx program which is an exchange program for xx Young Leaders to study a course in one of US universities and I was the team leader of the project which includes xx & American students which got 3rd place Award among 10 teams. The second main area that I could express my ability to be a leader is my career. After I graduate I start working directly as Data analyst in Strategy & Planning in one of the leading Telecom Company in xx, where I gained most of the skills as data analyst. Participating in xx which was one of xx telecom big project implemented in xx and representing xx at this age was a big experiment for me, yet being one of the first countries to implement the project gave my manager the trust to put me as his replacement to lead the team while he is away, And the confidence to let me train new resources in the team despite the age difference.Besides my educational background and career, I’m really passionate about volunteering in different area, but mainly I enjoy helping people with startups. Mostly in my free time I enjoy swimming and reading as well.In the end, I understand this program is very competitive, attracting highly motivated Researchers, but I am convinced that my good record at the University and professional experiences give me a strong place to be part of this team.
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I'm about to apply for a PhD position, and I would really appreciate every comment that can help me improve my letter.

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Dear Ms. XX,

I am writing to apply appreciate this opportunity to introduce myself and support my application for the XX position offered by XX University. position. With my educational background and work ing experience, I strongly believe that I am a suitable applicant candidate for this program, and I feel very enthusiastic for about applying for this role.

Creativity is the key word of what I am looking aim for in my studies as well as in my career. During my bachelor's, I was always impressed about interested in programming and how we could solve problems by writing some our own algorithms, a process which requires a lot of thinking outside the box. And as a data analyst, I was always fascinated by of how I could have use a wide range of data which I could outline to understand customer behavior, analyze business KPIs, and evaluate traffic trends. which was not a daily routine tasks I had to deal with different data sets from different departments, and I had to come up with the best and most-suitable way to of presenting my data insights.

Choosing to be a data scientist was a combination of both my study background and work experience. background. My master's at Bologna Business School gave me an opportunity to gain more knowledge in the areas of data mining, performance management, statistics, and big data analysis. tical. As part of my master's, I had to do 500 hours of internship which I have done at the XXX at Big Data and Analytics Competence Centre in XX. As an intern, my assignment was to develop a recommender system for a real estate agency, belonging, which involved three main steps. The first was pre-processing and cleaning data. The second was finding and implementing models to impute NA and, since data is are crucial for a good recommending system, Therefore, we introduced two machine-learning models (Generalized Low Rank Model & Deep -Learning with auto-encoder) implemented in a H2O package. Finally, the third step involved applying a scoring formula for ranking the houses which resulted in presenting a new scoring formula based on Lucene Similarity. The That pilot project is pilot was implemented at XXX, considering and the main technology which used H2O was the first such technology implemented across the company. which is new Technology. Also, I presented the work at Pycon9 in Florence on 21 April 2018.

Being a leader as a woman is really challenging in my society. However, my educational path was one of the first reasons to make me believe more in myself as a leader. At age 18, I had to decide to choose my major at university, and as like most of the students at that age, you have I felt I had to either to follow your my parents' wish, decision, society view of best major, or to choose what you I liked the most. (which is the hardest in my society). And I chose the latter one at that time although it was a big decision for me to fight go against my parents and society welling and study what I liked.

I lead many successful projects at university, which involved collaborating with different students from different background and of various ages. One of the main projects that I lead at the university level was participating in the xx competition among 7 against seven universities all over xx to come up with an e-business idea, and we got the 1st won first place. award. Another unique experience that I had while I was at university was getting selected in for the xxx program which is an exchange program for xx Young Leaders to study a course in one of a US university, and I was the team leader of the project which included xx and American students and came third out of ten teams. which got 3rd place Award among 10 teams.

The second main area that I could I also got an opportunity to demonstrate my leadership skills at the start of express my ability to be a leader is my career. After I graduated, I started working directly as a data analyst in Strategy & Planning in one of the leading telecom companies in xx, where I gained most of the valuable professional skills in that role. as data analyst. Participating in xx which was one of xx Telecom's big major projects implemented in xx and representing xx at this age was a big experiment for me, but yet being representing one of the first countries to implement the project gave my manager the trust to put me as his replacement to lead in charge of the team while he is was away and the confidence to let me train new resources in the team members despite the age difference.

Besides my educational background and career, Outside my work, I am really passionate about volunteering in different areas, but mainly I enjoy helping people with startups. Mostly In my free time, I enjoy swimming and reading. as well.In the end,

I understand this program is very competitive, attracting highly motivated researchers, but I am convinced that my good excellent record at the university and professional experiences give would make me a strong place to be part an effective member of this the ABC team.

Thank you for your kind consideration, and I look forward to your reply.

Yours sincerely,

Maria Paganini

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