Dear friends,

You know that how important the motivation letter is, so would you please help me and correct my letter, because English is not my first language.

Would you please answer this question either?

Is it better to sign the letter and also is the color of pen important?

Dear Sir or Madam;

I would like to apply for the Master's Degree in *** at *** starting in August 2007. I am studying in my last semester (studying on my thesis) in Bachelor of Engineering in Industrial Engineering with specialization in System Analysis. I would like to continue my study in order to gain applied knowledge and experiences by academic research in your master’s program.

With increase need for flexibility of manufacturing systems, this tool is so beneficial for cost reduction. Besides I am so interested in optimization, improvement and development of manufacturing systems and processes. Therefore, when I was introduced to the *** as a tool for enhancing and analysing the real systems, I found my way and decided to dedicate myself to this field of study. Three factors fascinate me to this field; first the purpose of this tool is improvement and optimization, which I am keen on it. Second it is a field of study that really depends on computers and updated knowledge and softwares. Third it is new-born field of study that growing rapidly and I am confident that I can have a significant progress by studying in this master’s degree, besides propose new methods or approach in this field.

For satisfaction my need in ***, I have chosen this subject as my bachelor’s thesis (…(thesis title)). I, also, try to combine a new mathematical approach, ***, to the ***. I am sure that when I complete my thesis, this will be one of the best thesises in bachelor’s degree in my current university. Besides I have tried to learn and investigate in many *** softwares, like ***.

Real systems are usually big in size, so it is very time consuming to *** a real system, therefore a professional team should work on a project. As I like to cooperate with others, this is a good reason why I want to study in this master’s degree.

One of the most important aspect of this master’ degree in University *** is that the university has work integrated learning and studying is connected to the high technology industries, so that the university is well known for its intimate cooperation with local industries. Also, cooperation with *** University of Technology is admirable and makes this master’s program superb.

My future plan is to have an in-depth research on this field besides working with professional team in high technology companies as a system analyser to assess and improve the processes. As well, my ambition is continuing my studies in PhD degree, so that I can share my real experiences and applied knowledge to the students.

I have always tried to apply my theoretical knowledge in practice. This is why I took two internships during my university studies and why I have been a member of *** scientific foundation since 2003. This organization helps students to bring their theoretical knowledge to practice.

I have a flexible attitude and can work well with team or independent research, which is so vital for this master’s degree. Besides, this program is n international program, so that I will introduce with many cultures and variety of students that can be so exiting.

Furthermore, I am keen on manufacturing processes and experienced many of them, which is so helpful for this program. Also, statistics and probability are important aspects in this field, which I know them well.

I hope that I will have the opportunity to prove my abilities in the master’s program. I look forward to hearing from you in the near future regarding the success of my application. Should you require further information of any kind, please contact me by contact information below.

Yours faithfully,

Davood I.

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Iam waiting for youe Help, thanks in advance.
You should sign all letters. Black or blue ink are best as other colours will be seen as eccentric. Problems highlighted for you.

Dear Sir or Madam;

I would like to apply for the Master's Degree in *** at *** starting in August 2007. I am studying in my last semester (studying on my thesis) in Bachelor of Engineering in Industrial Engineering with specialization in System Analysis. I would like to continue my study in order to gain applied knowledge and experiences by academic research in your master’s program.

With increase need for flexibility of manufacturing systems, this tool is so beneficial for cost reduction. Besides I am so interested in optimization, improvement and development of manufacturing systems and processes. Therefore, when I was introduced to the *** as a tool for enhancing and analysing the real systems, I found my way and decided to dedicate myself to this field of study. Three factors fascinate me to this field; first the purpose of this tool is improvement and optimization, which I am keen on it. Second it is a field of study that really depends on computers and updated knowledge and softwares. Third it is new-born field of study that growing rapidly and I am confident that I can have a significant progress by studying in this master’s degree, besides propose new methods or approach in this field.

For satisfaction my need in ***, I have chosen this subject as my bachelor’s thesis (…(thesis title)). I, also, try to combine a new mathematical approach, ***, to the ***. I am sure that when I complete my thesis, this will be one of the best thesises in bachelor’s degree in my current university. Besides I have tried to learn and investigate in many *** softwares, like ***.

Real systems are usually big in size, so it is very time consuming to *** a real system, therefore a professional team should work on a project. As I like to cooperate with others, this is a good reason why I want to study in this master’s degree.

One of the most important aspect of this master’ degree in University *** is that the university has work integrated learning and studying is connected to the high technology industries, so that the university is well known for its intimate cooperation with local industries. Also, cooperation with *** University of Technology is admirable and makes this master’s program superb.

My future plan is to have an in-depth research on this field besides working with professional team in high technology companies as a system analyser to assess and improve the processes. As well, my ambition is continuing my studies in PhD degree, so that I can share my real experiences and applied knowledge to the students.

I have always tried to apply my theoretical knowledge in practice. This is why I took two internships during my university studies and why I have been a member of *** scientific foundation since 2003. This organization helps students to bring their theoretical knowledge to practice.

I have a flexible attitude and can work well with team or independent research, which is so vital for this master’s degree. Besides, this program is n international program, so that I will introduce with many cultures and variety of students that can be so exiting.

Furthermore, I am keen on manufacturing processes and experienced many of them, which is so helpful for this program. Also, statistics and probability are important aspects in this field, which I know them well.

I hope that I will have the opportunity to prove my abilities in the master’s program. I look forward to hearing from you in the near future regarding the success of my application. Should you require further information of any kind, please contact me by contact information below.

Yours faithfully,

Davood I.
Thanks a lot for your suggestions, I appreciate you. I edited my letter.

Is it OK now? Is it a good motivation letter or a windy one? Does it look like motivation letter?

I am waiting for your new suggestions.

Dear Sir or Madam;

I would like to apply for the Master's Degree in *** at *** starting in August 2007. I am studying in my last semester (studying on my thesis) in Bachelor of Engineering in Industrial Engineering with specialization in System Analysis. I would like to continue my studies in order to gain applied knowledge and experiences by academic research in your master’s program.

With growing need for flexibility of manufacturing systems, *** will be a beneficial tool for cost reduction. Also, I am interested in optimization, improvement and development of manufacturing systems and processes. Therefore, when I was introduced to the *** as a tool for enhancing and analysing real systems, I found my way and decided to dedicate myself to this field of study. I have been attracted to ***, because first the purpose of this tool is improvement and optimization, which I am really motivated. Second it is a field of study that really depends on computers and updated knowledge. Third it is a field of study which is being popular rapidly.

I have chosen this subject as my bachelor’s thesis (…(thesis title)) to gain experiments and take my knowledge to practice. Also, I have planned to combine a new mathematical approach, ***, with ***. I am sure that when I complete my thesis, this will be one of the best and applied ones in bachelor’s degree in my current university. Also, I have tried to learn and investigate many *** softwares, such as ***.

Real manufacturing systems are usually big size and have many variables and data, so it is very time consuming to *** a real system, therefore a professional team should work on a certain project. As I like to cooperate with others, this is a good reason why I want to study in this master’s degree.

One of the most important viewpoint of this master’ degree at University *** is that the university has work integrated learning and studying is connected to the high technology industries. Also, the university is well known for its intimate cooperation with local industries. So we can easily research and do our projects during studies at university. Also, cooperation with *** University of Technology is admirable and makes this master’s program superb.

My future plan is researching into *** exhaustively and working with professional group in high technology companies to assess and improve processes. Also, my ambition is continue my studies in PhD degree, so that I can share my real experiences and applied knowledge with the students.

I have always tried to apply my theoretical knowledge in practice. This is why I took two internships during my university studies and why I have been a member of *** scientific foundation since 2003. This organization helps students to bring their theoretical knowledge to practice.

I have a flexible attitude and can work well in team or independently, which is so vital for this master’s degree. Besides, this program is an international program, so that I will see variety of students from different cultures, which is so exciting.

Furthermore, I am keen on manufacturing processes and I have practiced many of them, which is so helpful for this program. Also, statistics and probability are important aspects in this field and I know their applications well.

I hope that I will have the opportunity to prove my abilities in the master’s program. I look forward to hearing from you in the near future regarding the success of my application. Should you require further information of any kind, please contact me.

Yours faithfully,

Davood I.
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