Hello teachers!

I'm brazilian and i'm aplying to a PhD in France. I wrote a motivation letter and i woul be very glad to yhe ones who take a time to read and post coments on it.

Thank you in advance,

Daiane.

Motivation letter

I am writing to apply for XX PhD. Program on Marketing field of concentration next September. I got a master degree at XX Business School from University XX , one of the most prestigious graduation programs on business in Brazil. I worked on a dissertation under the direction of Professor XXX. Currently working at a business consulting group, I already had experience on teaching, tutoring and academic research. I believe that my teaching and tutoring experience combined with my course work and research background in consumer behavior using on-line ethnography technique make me a strong candidate for the your qualitative track in Marketing field.

As my application form shows, I have had excellent opportunities to conduct a variety of research projects during my graduate studies, including multi-methods investigations. I have also worked as a teaching for undergraduate students, a position that involved instruction in advertising writing and the application of consumer behavior theories to advertising. Among the most satisfying experiences for me as a teacher has been instructing students on an individual basis as a tutor in their major papers. I believe this kind of one-on-one interaction to be essential to their development as researchers and professionals and to accomplish to teacher’s continuous learning process. I use to get enthusiastic with their research ideas and at the present I am still working on and reading about the subjects they approached on their major papers.

My interest at the consumer behavior at the internet and my preference for qualitative methods provided me with the subject for my dissertation research. The project, XXX, examined the online communities to verify their role as reference groups at different stages of the decision processes. I used netnography, an adaptation of ethnographic technique to investigate online communities, combined to Computer-Mediated Discourse Analysis, which brought very interesting results. These results were published at an important Latin American periodic: XX Vol. VIII, n. 3, Sep – Dec. 2006. (http://www.XX.br ). A working paper I wrote on the subject was also published at XX (Volume 1)/15.

To further my career aspirations of becoming part of a university or business school faculty, and to work as an international business consultant, I want to obtain a PhD. Degree in Business Administration from an European school. Having this knowledge will allow me to better understand management principles and to combine practice with most advanced theories. Added to that, the international dimension provided by studying at XXand the philosophy of interdisciplinary training will prepare me to deal with the most diverse situations in professional activities.

I believe no education is complete without experience. Armed with a solid understanding of academic principles, I can continue my career where I will add to with my experience. I believe obtaining a PhD. Degree will provide the necessary background for me to be to conduct teacher, researcher or consultant activities in the best way.

Please find included at the application form all the documents needed. I will be happy to send you any other information you would like to.

Hope to hear from you soon,

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I am writing to apply for *** PhD. Program on Marketing field of concentration (this makes little sense to me - are you sure it is correct?) next September. I got a master degree at *** Business School from University *** , one of the most prestigious graduation programs on business in Brazil. I worked on a dissertation under the direction of Professor ***. Currently working at a business consulting group, I already had experience on teaching, tutoring and academic research. I believe that my teaching and tutoring experience combined with my course work and research background in consumer behavior using on-line ethnography technique make me a strong candidate for the your qualitative track in Marketing field.you are missing several commas in this last sentence. In fact, a large number of your later sentences are also lacking important commas, so check through carefully.

As my application form shows, I have had excellent opportunities to conduct a variety of research projects during my graduate studies, including multi-methods investigations. I have also worked as a teaching for undergraduate students, a position that involved instruction in advertising writing and the application of consumer behavior theories to advertising. Among the most satisfying experiences for me as a teacher has been instructing students on an individual basis as a tutor in their major papers. I believe this kind of one-on-one interaction to be essential to their development as researchers and professionals and to accomplish to teacher’s continuous learning process. I use to get enthusiastic with their research ideas and at the present I am still working on and reading about the subjects they approached on their major papers.

My interest at the consumer behavior at the internet and my preference for qualitative methods provided me with the subject for my dissertation research. The project, ***, examined the online communities to verify their role as reference groups at different stages of the decision processes. I used netnography, an adaptation of ethnographic technique to investigate online communities, combined to Computer-Mediated Discourse Analysis, which brought very interesting results. These results were published at an important Latin American periodic: *** Vol. VIII, n. 3, Sep – Dec. 2006. (http://www.EnglishForward.com#error ). A working paper I wrote on the subject was also published at *** (Volume 1)/15.

To further my career aspirations of becoming part of a university or business school faculty, and to work as an international business consultant, I want to obtain a PhD. Degree in Business Administration from an European school. Having this knowledge will allow me to better understand management principles and to combine practice with most advanced theories. Added to that, the international dimension provided by studying at *** the philosophy of interdisciplinary training will prepare me to deal with the most diverse situations in professional activities.

I believe no education is complete without experience. Armed with a solid understanding of academic principles, I can continue my career where I will add to with my experience. I believe obtaining a PhD. Degree will provide the necessary background for me to be to conduct teacher, researcher or consultant activities in the best way.

Please find included at the application form all the documents needed. I will be happy to send you any other information you would like to.

Hope to hear from you soon, very informal
Thank you for your comments.

I really get myself in trouble when deciding where to put commas because in portuguese we have different reasons to use them. And it also seem that i missed that preposition class...

I will review it and post it again, ok?

Daiane
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Hi,

can any body help me in writing motivation latter for Phd in Management

regards

A K