Hi everyone! Please help me to write motivation letter. It would be very nice, if someone could correct my letter.

Thanks, Hanna

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to apply for the Master Degree program in International Management-CEMS.

My name is Hanna. I was born in the capital of the of , in . Being an active person with sanguineous temperament, I give special attention to improvement of my intellectual and academic skills. Learning at musical and grammar schools developed in me sense of intellectual values of different kinds and in different languages.

During my school studies I was a class monitor. This allowed me to develop and use my leading and organizational skills and convinced me that I want to tie my future career with administration.

As I was 16, I chose my future profession and university. My relatives work in the field of business, which influenced my interests; therefore I decided to get higher education at the economic university. For achievement of my goals I selected the of in . At the moment I am in my third year at this university and my major subject is International Trade.

Living and studying in the without any family member became a serious test of my volitional treats, because I had to adapt to a new independent life, new people and culture. I found myself a quick leaner, even the fact that I had to study all the subjects in Czech haven’t become an obstacle.

Studying at the university gave me good theoretical and practical basis for my future education, and gave me opportunity to study some interesting subjects, such as International Business and Managerial systems in . These subjects were part of CESP program, which was a unique opportunity to meet foreign students, learn variety of cultures. It was exciting experience of working in an international team, in which I was a manager.

Working during summer holidays in company P, which specializes itself in sale and distribution of foodstuffs, I had possibility to apply my communication skills and improve skills of manager, because my main tasks were communication with clients and other employees, order analysis and other administration tasks. These activities allowed me to show self-discipline, orderliness and clear planning of working time.

As I never stop at what has been accomplished, I want to become proficient in many subjects and become a highly-qualified specialist. For this purpose I have chosen exactly International Management, as one of the best Master-programs in management. I am convinced that international aspect and high standard of education, which are offered by CEMS program, will be the perfect continuation of my education and will help me to get worth theoretical and practical skills in the field of management.

Thank you for considering my application
Hanna: Welcome to the Forum! Thanks for posting.

I have some suggestions for your application letter.
ZajcevaI am writing to apply for the Master Degree program in International Management-CEMS.

My name is Hanna. I was born in the capital of the Republic of Belarus, in Minsk. Being an active person with sanguineous (I had to look this word up, because the more common word is "sanguine". I don't think you mean "accompanied by bloodshed") temperament, I give special attention to improvement of my intellectual and academic skills. Learning at musical ("music" is correct, not musical) and grammar schools developed in me sense of intellectual values of different kinds and in different languages.

During my school studies I was a class monitor. This allowed me to develop and use my leading (leadership) and organizational skills and convinced me that I want to tie my future career with administration.

As When I was 16, I chose my future profession and university. My relatives work in the field of business, which influenced my interests; therefore I decided to get my higher education at the economic university. For achievement of my goals I selected the University of Economics in Prague. At this moment I am in my third year at this university and my major subject is International Trade.

Living and studying in the Czech Republic without any family members became a serious test of my volitional treats (I don't understand "volitional treats" - perhaps you mean "self confidence" or "self assurance"?), because I had to adapt to a new independent life, new people and culture. I found myself a quick leaner, even the fact that I had to study all the subjects in Czech hasn’t been an obstacle.

Studying at the university gave me a good theoretical and practical basis for my future education, and gave me an opportunity to study some interesting subjects, such as International Business and Managerial systems in Eastern Europe. These subjects were part of CESP program, which was a unique opportunity to meet foreign students, and learn variety of cultures. It was an exciting experience of working in an international team, in which I was a manager.

Working during summer holidays in company P, which specializes itself in the sale and distribution of foodstuffs, I had the possibility to apply my communication skills and improve my management skills of manager, because my main tasks were communication with clients and other employees, order analysis and other administration tasks. These activities allowed me to show self-discipline, orderliness and clear planning of working time.

As I never stop at what has been accomplished, I want to become proficient in many subjects and become a highly-qualified specialist. For this purpose I have specifically chosen exactly International Management, as one of the best Master-programs in management. I am convinced that international aspect and high standard of education, which are offered by CEMS program, will be the perfect continuation of my education and will help me to get valuable worth theoretical and practical skills in the field of management.

Thank you very much!! Wish you happy New year!!!