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i have recently sat my english literature exam and my english language exams.

i would love some help with my english literature answer first of all as i'm not sure if the points i have made in my answer are of a high enough standard in order to attain an a*.

here is the outline of what i wrote:

My exam board is edexcel and the three texts i have studied are; poem anthology, of mice and men and an inspector calls.

In my exam i wrote the following points for each text;

anthology question : miracle on st david's day and an unknown girl are both poems which display long lasting impressions left on the poet. Compare how successfully each poet conveys their emotions.

similarities -
both in the present tense to engage the reader
miracle- "i am reading poetry to the insane" - only comes as a mild shock due to the modal verb "might" in the first stanza (it might be a country house)
unknown girl - "she is icing my hand" has connotations of british culture and therefore one would relate to this idea.
2nd similarity: miracle - uses enjambment to emphasize idea of "an old woman offers me buckets of coal" this tests the maxim of relevance and the reader; one feels inclined not to laugh as this offer may seem random but it is not politically correct to laugh or snigger.
unknown girl - "i'll lean across a country" literally not possible but shows her longing for India.
difference : miracle - uses imagery of candles to symbolise hope , "still as wax" implying an unlit candle, "the daffodils are flame" suggesting the candle has become alight, symbol of hope achieved
unknown girl - not enough time to finish this point!

of mice and men : "the novel is set on a busy ranch, yet the central theme is loneliness" to what extent do you agree with this statement?

lennie - berated by rabbit in section 6, even his imagination betrayed him "you ain't fit to lick the boots of no rabbit" the sick irony being that his passion for tending the rabbits could have never become true and therefore the dream was always doomed
curley's wife - anonymous, property of curley, "jail bait" "tart" , treated with contempt, even the girls at Susy's are given more respect because they're "clean" steinbeck being a misogynist adds to this contempt for women, her death truly gives her the limelight, "the sun streaks were high up the wall"
whit- has a vice-grip on his magazine
candy - looses dog

an inspector calls: how are the prejudices and attitudes of the birling family exposed by eva/daisy's death?

birling creates this "them and us" attitude through his speech about britain being a "free country." ironic that he doesn't listen to the plea of the factory workers if it is a so-called free country.
sheila's attitude towards love changes as she recognises gerald to be a cynical and fake man. priestly uses the convention of mistaken identity when sheila hands back the ring the gerald "we're not the same people who sat down to dinner." inklings of doubt can be seen in the stage directions when arthur birling is sat at "one end of the table and his wife at the other" birling and sybil are in fact worlds apart and maybe, almost certainly, birling only married his "social superior" to tactfully fly up the social ladder.


for the media paper (english language), writing to discuss, argue, persuade was a question about arguing for or against single - sex schools so i used a parody at the start. i changed charles dickens' quote, "Now what i want is, Facts. teach these boys and girls nothing but, Facts!" into "now what i want is scintillating Grades. teach these boys and girls, Grades!"

for the writing to analyse, review and comment the question was to comment on a statement about how women have too much to do today with the running of the house, wanting a job and bringing up a family so i used another parody. i changed the jane austen quote, "it is a truth universally acknowledged, that a single man in possession of a good fortune, must also be in want of a wife" to " it is a truth universally acknowledged, that an independent woman, in possession of a prospering job, must also be in want of a fantastic family. isn't it?"

would the examiner be impressed by these openings or are they a definite mark grabber?

thank you very much in advance.

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Hi,

This is a long 'query'.

Here are a few quick responses.

1. Are you supposed to write your answers in point form, or should they be in proper essay form?

2. I find it slightly hard to read all this becase you have almost no capital letters. To be truthful, it's a bit irritating and makes me take your work a bit less seriously. I hope you used them in your exam!

3. What level are you studying at? eg GCE O level? A level?

Best wishes, Clive
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This is only an outline of what i wrote during the exam. In the actual exam i wrote in proper essay form and with capital letters. Plus this is GCSE level.
Thank you.
Hi,

This is only an outline of what i wrote during the exam. In the actual exam i wrote in proper essay form OK

and with capital letters. My advice is to get so used to capital letters that you just use them automatically. As I said, the lack makes the reader's job a little more difficult. I tend to think 'If he doesn't care about the little things, he probably won't care about the big things.'

Plus this is GCSE level. I guess that's a bit like what used to be 'O' levels.

I have recently sat my english literature exam and my english language exams.

i would love some help with my english literature answer first of all as i'm not sure if the points i have made in my answer are of a high enough standard in order to attain an a*.

here is the outline of what i wrote:

My exam board is edexcel and the three texts i have studied are; poem anthology, of mice and men and an inspector calls.

In my exam i wrote the following points for each text;

anthology question : miracle on st david's day and an unknown girl are both poems which display long lasting impressions left on the poet. Compare how successfully each poet conveys their emotions.
I don't know these poems.

similarities -
both in the present tense to engage the reader
miracle- "i am reading poetry to the insane" - only comes as a mild shock due to the modal verb "might" in the first stanza (it might be a country house)
unknown girl - "she is icing my hand" has connotations of british culture and therefore one would relate to this idea.
2nd similarity: miracle - uses enjambment to emphasize idea of "an old woman offers me buckets of coal" this tests the maxim of relevance and the reader; one feels inclined not to laugh as this offer may seem random but it is not politically correct to laugh or snigger.
unknown girl - "i'll lean across a country" literally not possible but shows her longing for India.
difference : miracle - uses imagery of candles to symbolise hope , "still as wax" implying an unlit candle, "the daffodils are flame" suggesting the candle has become alight, symbol of hope achieved
unknown girl - not enough time to finish this point!

of mice and men : "the novel is set on a busy ranch, yet the central theme is loneliness" to what extent do you agree with this statement?

I don't see how your comments relate to the above topic.

lennie - berated by rabbit in section 6, even his imagination betrayed him "you ain't fit to lick the boots of no rabbit" the sick irony being that his passion for tending the rabbits could have never become true and therefore the dream was always doomed
curley's wife - anonymous, property of curley, "jail bait" "tart" , treated with contempt, even the girls at Susy's are given more respect because they're "clean" steinbeck being a misogynist adds to this contempt for women, her death truly gives her the limelight, "the sun streaks were high up the wall"
whit- has a vice-grip on his magazine
candy - looses dog

an inspector calls: how are the prejudices and attitudes of the birling family exposed by eva/daisy's death?

same comment

birling creates this "them and us" attitude through his speech about britain being a "free country." ironic that he doesn't listen to the plea of the factory workers if it is a so-called free country.
sheila's attitude towards love changes as she recognises gerald to be a cynical and fake man. priestly uses the convention of mistaken identity when sheila hands back the ring the gerald "we're not the same people who sat down to dinner." inklings of doubt can be seen in the stage directions when arthur birling is sat at "one end of the table and his wife at the other" birling and sybil are in fact worlds apart and maybe, almost certainly, birling only married his "social superior" to tactfully fly up the social ladder.

for the media paper (english language), writing to discuss, argue, persuade was a question about arguing for or against single - sex schools so i used a parody at the start. i changed charles dickens' quote, "Now what i want is, Facts. teach these boys and girls nothing but, Facts!" into "now what i want is scintillating Grades. teach these boys and girls, Grades!"

OK, I suppose,as long as the examiner knows Dickens well.

for the writing to analyse, review and comment the question was to comment on a statement about how women have too much to do today with the running of the house, wanting a job and bringing up a family so i used another parody. i changed the jane austen quote, "it is a truth universally acknowledged, that a single man in possession of a good fortune, must also be in want of a wife" to " it is a truth universally acknowledged, that an independent woman, in possession of a prospering job, must also be in want of a fantastic family. isn't it?"

It's an odd topic. I'd say most women do not 'want' a job, they 'have' a job.

would the examiner be impressed by these openings or are they a definite mark grabber?

They seem OK. They show your confidence.

Your notes seem thoughtful. But be careful to always focus on the topic or question. It's hard to judge further without seeing them in proper essay form.

Personally, I don't see them as A, but I may be a poor judge of such matters. Just be patient until you get your results.

Good luck, Clive