My holiday in the garden

I am spending my holiday this year in a big garden. It is a nice place. The weather is very beautiful. We are living in a small house in a small village.

In the foreground i can swing behind a big tree and there are a lot of flowers with different colors. And if I want to relax I can sit on the chair and read what I want to read. Also there is square pond beyond the big tree. The view is really attractive.

In the background there is a large yard and field. The yard has many cows and plants, it’s picturesque. Also the golf course occupies a large area from the garden. I can see a lot of people are playing golf and this is an interesting time. The scene is fantastic also with the mountain and the waterfall, so i can climb and swim and do whatever i like to do.

The garden is really like a paradise and I wish not to leave it. Maybe we will visit it again the next year. I advise from all to visit it also because it is a gold chance to live in this place

^ ^

i hope that anyone check my mistakes...

Asma

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Hi, Ms. Strawberry,

Your basic grammar seems okay to me.

But somehow your feelings about the garden didn't come through very well. It may have something to do with your sentence patterns.

Just my 2 cents.

Maybe others will jump in.
Hi Miss Strawberry,

Your grammar is good. There are some minute mistakes such as:

*Also there is square pond beyond the big tree. ( there is A square pond ...)

* I can see a lot of people are playing golf . I prefer ( a lot of people playing) without (are)

* I advise from all to visit it ... ( I advise you all to visit it)

Good-Bye!

Yours,
Ali al-Majnooni
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"because it is a gold chance to live in this place "

I don't understand what you mean by this.

I agree with Julie that it would be nice to have a little more about why this is such a great garden.
Thanx alot for the notice julielai.. and i didn't understand this sentence (your feelings about the garden didn't come through very well. It may have something to do with your sentence patterns) .. did u mean that my description and my feelings about the garden were not enough..

And thanx also to Ali and Abbie.. ^ ^

Abbie i meant " u must go to this place and if didn't go .. u will miss it " so that i called it by a gold chance = A precious opportunity.

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Hi Miss S,

"A precious opportunity" comes across better in English than "a gold chance", which doesn't really mean anything to us. We sometimes say " a golden opprtunity", but this often has more to do with financial things.

I think what Julie
may be saying is, that although you tell us what you can see from the garden, perhaps you could put in something a little more personal; for example, you might tell us "I really love this garden because it is so peaceful". "When I am in this garden, I don't need to go on holiday because ..."
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