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Dear A,
It's been too long since our last visit. I thought I should write to you to see everything is. So, How are you and your family doing?
I have some news that I want to tell you. Do you remember that I told you I wanted to travel to Japan on my own? I made it. The trip was so amazing. I shilly-shallied about traveling abroad alone. You know, a girl in a faraway country can't be a possible thing. I was easy to meet new people because most of them are Vietnamese and American. They were surprised when I said I was traveling alone, as I've always been a little shy girl. I had to did everything by myself a lot of things and sometimes I felt loneliness. But it's fine to me because, for the first time in my life, I've not been able to do by someone's decision. I can do everything I want, eat food that I like, go everywhere I like. Moreover, It had some activities in the hostel at night. It's such a lovely and wonderful hostel. This trip has given me so much independence, confidence and proves that I can do things.
I got you a picture which I had tool in sunset afternoon near a river full of cherry blossoms and small gift souvenir for your sister. I hope you will like it. I plan to come soon for a visit. I can't wait to see you!
Love,
Minh

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Dear A,
It's been too long since our last visit. I thought I should write to you to see how everything is. So, how are you and your family doing?
I have some news that I want to tell you. Do you remember that I told you I wanted to travel to Japan on my own? I made it. The trip was so amazing. I shilly-shallied about traveling abroad alone. You know, girls aren't "supposed" to travel alone in foreign countries. It was easy to meet new people because most of them were Vietnamese and American. They were surprised when I, a little shy girl, said I was traveling alone. as I've always been a little shy girl. I had to do everything by myself a lot of things and sometimes I felt lonely. But it's fine to me because, for the first time in my life, I've not been able to depend on someone else's decision. I can do everything I want, eat food that I like, go everywhere I like. Moreover, there were some activities in the hostel at night. It's such a lovely and wonderful hostel. This trip has given me so much independence, confidence and proves that I can do things.
I got you a picture which I had taken [???] in sunset afternoon near a river full of cherry blossoms and small gift souvenir for your sister. I hope you will like it. I plan to come soon for a visit. I can't wait to see you!
Love,
Minh

Maybe "I got you a picture which I took" should be "I have a picture for you which I took"

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