Well, it's not really a poem...yet. First, I don't even know the characteristics of a good poem, but anyway...

When sunset seems to be a heartrending polaroid
Sit still and wait for darkness and insidious void
Then you'll find out that they'll never come to reign
Coz million stars shall replace a sun that waned
Hehe...I just realized, I posted it on the wrong forums.
I really like it. It's very much like your style.