Hi guys!

I'd be really happy if anyone could have a look at my little essay. It's not that long so it won't take ages to quickly go through it.

Thanks in advance!

The new Rita

The new Rita has changed a lot and above all she developed herself.

She has become more self – confident and does not depend on Frank anymore (p. 77 ll. 2-4). Even if she is now standardized in her judgement in literal terms, she expressed her independance by writing a proper answer and not the answer Frank wanted to her to give.

Furthermore she acquired experience of life, since she realizes the mistakes she did. She admits “[she] was so hungry“ and “[she] wanted it all so much that [she] didn’t want it to be questioned.” (p. 76 ll. 29,30) Rita learnt that literary criticism is not only about “quotes an’ empty phrases” (p. 76 l. 28) but as well about yourself and what you make of it.

Rita’s most valuable change in life is her achieved ability to choose freely between several possibilities, because her doing was previously dominated by Denny or even by the whole working class in a way. As she states several times, “[she has] a choice” (p.77 l. 6) now. It is entirely up to her, whether she wants to have a baby or where she is going to spend christmas, it is only her decision (p. 77 ll. 27,28).
who is this new rita
The protagonist in "Educating Rita"...
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Hi Na!tsabes,

Here's my version:

The new Rita

The new Rita has changed a lot and become more mature.

She has become more self – confident and does not depend on Frank anymore (p. 77 ll. 2-4). Even if she is now standardized in her judgement in literal terms, she is expressing her independence by writing her own proper answer and not the answer Frank wanted to her to write.

Furthermore she has become experienced after realizing the mistakes she did. She admits “[she] was so hungry“ and “[she] wanted it all so much that [she] didn’t want it to be questioned.” (p. 76 ll. 29,30) Rita learnt that literary criticism is not only about “quotes an’ empty phrases” (p. 76 l. 28) but as well about yourself and what you make of it.

Rita’s most valuable change in life is her achieved ability to choose freely between several possibilities, because her doing was previously dominated by Denny or even by the whole working class in a way. As she states several times, “[she has] a choice” (p.77 l. 6) now. It is entirely up to her, whether she wants to have a baby or where she is going to spend christmas, she is now the deciding factor (p. 77 ll. 27,28).
Thank you Savvysavz! Especially the first introductory sentence was quite hard, because I didn't know how to express what you called "become more mature".
You're welcome Nats!Emotion: smile

You can develop a project, an idea but a developed person would give a different meaning. I think 'mature' was more appropriate in your context.

Regards,

Savvy
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I agree with him... He did correct the most of your mistakes... All I can say is:

good luck!!!

:-D
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your grammar using is quite good Emotion: smile..continue your hardwork dear..

for your information,i'm still new in exploring in english language.i'm student in tesl in one of high school...i find that your grammar level is very good..congratulation! Emotion: wink
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