Hello everybody,

I just found this forum, and it is absolutely great! I want to thank all the good people that are doing this outstanding job of helping others with their letters.

I am trying to apply to an Erasmus masters program in Law & Economics and I would appreciate your help very much.

I had a lot of second thoughts about posting my letter of motivation, because I'm afraid of someone stealing my ideas, as there is a lot of competition in the acceptance to this program, but I decided it was worth it if I can get better results.

The idea is to tell them why I am interested in Law & Economics in general, and in this program (it's called EMLE) in particular. I hope my letter does the job…

Plus, I marked the words and phrases I'm not sure about with an underline or brackets.

Thank you so much for your help guys (and girlsEmotion: smile)

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To the attention of the EMLE (or – European Master in Law and Economics) Program selection committee,

Letter of motivation – [ name ]

My name is --------, and I'm a 25 year old Israeli Law student. In the middle of next year (2007) I will complete my LL.B (With a [course?] cluster on Law and Technology) from the University of --------. I started my studies after three years of service in the Israeli --------- Force(s), and seven months of working in my family's ------ business, mainly coordinating import transactions with foreign corporations.

I first became interested (or took interest?) in the Economic Analysis of Law (discipline) when it was introduced to me (us?) on the first year of my studies. I have encountered "Law and Economics" afterwards in different contexts, where implementation of the (this?) discipline was presented to us. Because we were taught only the basics, I found it hard to apply Economic principles on the various fields of Law. This difficulty led me to a conclusion that this discipline should be studied profoundly and in an inclusive manner, while applying it to different branches of Law.

During (?) my years in Law school I encountered many social wrongs that exist in our society. As a result, I (have?) started volunteering at "Halev" (War on Poverty in Israel Association) station at the execution of judgments department in the Court of -------, where we give consultation to those who cannot afford the service(s?) of a lawyer. As a social active person, I find the field of "Law & Economics" fascinating and innovative, because it demonstrates an integrated approach of economic efficiency and distributive justice. I believe that the knowledge I can obtain in this program will help me understand (maybe – better understanding of?) and analyze policy making decisions, and ultimately assist me in my goal of taking part (or participating?) in achieving social change.

I was first introduced to the EMLE Program while on my second year at the University of ------, when I met an EMLE student from the Netherlands who spoke highly of the program and recommended it to me. I became interested in the program and in the European Union, as a growing power in the political and legal ring (or arena?), and participated in courses such as "International Private Law" and "Introduction to EU Law", where I also learned about the economic and legal relations between Israel and the EU. All of these reasons convinced me that I want (would like?) to participate in the EMLE program.

I wish to get this exceptional opportunity to study for my masters degree in this distinguished program and become proficient (or expertise?) in (at?) this relatively new discipline, combined with living abroad and studying alongside students from other countries, different backgrounds and insights.

Therefore, I would be honored to take part at the EMLE program next year (and I will try to represent my country as well as I can - should i write that?).

I thank you deeply for considering my aplication.

Yours faithfully,

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well, first of all...it sounds pretty good...good job! (i would pick you ^^ )

and secondly....i would keep "proficient" and add "at" Emotion: wink
Thanks, but i really need thorough help with my letter.

I forgot to mention that i need to absolutely finish it by thursday morning...

I would appreciate your help very much

And merry Christmas everyone!
Students: Are you brave enough to let our tutors analyse your pronunciation?
sorry but im quite new too this stuff, so dont wanna give you "foolish" advices

its just, ive read many instructions and samples and yours sound really good to me.....i mean, perhaps its good the way it is....you cant be 100% sure. because you dont really know what they are looking for....

and besides im waiting for help too ^^
Ok guys, i made some major reforms, and this is the result so far.

Can someone who is proficient help me with it?

Thanks

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To the attention of the European Master in Law and Economics Programme selection committee,

Letter of Motivation

My name is ------- ---------, and I'm a 25 year old Israeli Law student. In mid 2007 I will graduate with an LL.B (with a cluster of courses in Law and Technology) from the University of --------. I started my studies after three years of service in the Israeli ---------- Forces, and seven months of working in my family's furniture business, mainly coordinating import transactions with foreign corporations.

I first took interest in the Economic Analysis of Law when it was introduced to me during the first year of my studies, in a course entitled "Basics of Economics for Law Students" (98). I came across "Law and Economics" afterwards in different contexts, where implementation of this discipline was only briefly discussed. I felt that a bigger emphasis ought to be placed on this topic (or – discipline), which should be studied thoroughly (or – holistically), and that it's implementation in the different branches of Law should be taught in a coherent way.

During my studies at Law school I have encountered a lot of social injustice that exist in our society. As a result, I started volunteering at "Halev" Organization (War on Poverty in Israel Association) station at the execution of judgments department in the Court of --------, where we give consultation to those who cannot afford the service of a lawyer. As a socially active person, I find the field of "Law & Economics" fascinating and innovative, because it demonstrates an integrated approach of economic efficiency and distributive justice.

The knowledge I can obtain in this program will help me to better understand and analyze the decisions taken in policy making process, and (hopefully) ultimately assist me achieving my goal in participating in the effort towards a social change.

An EMLE student from the introduced me to this programme while reading my second year at University. I was impressed by his high recommendations of the EMLE Programme. Since then, I became increasingly interested in this programme and in the European Union, as a growing power in the political and legal arena, thus leading me in taking courses such as "International Private Law" and "Introduction to EU Law", where I also learned about the economic and legal relations between Israel and the EU. All of these experiences have convinced me that I want to participate in the EMLE Programme, and I am therefore submitting my application.

What I would gain, if I am accepted to read my Masters within this field, would be the expertise in this relatively new discipline, combined with the excitement of living and studying in a foreign country, alongside students from many different places with unique backgrounds and insights.

Therefore, I would be honored to take part at the EMLE Programme next year where I can represent my country to the best of my ability.

I thank you deeply for considering my application.

Yours faithfully,

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BTW - are the words read/reading here correct? see - http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Reading_(for_degree )
Hi Johnny - I confess I was only skimmed, because your letter started out so strongly that I would have been surprised to find errors. I can't comment on the "read" and "reading" because they are not American uses, so I will hope a European will see this and provide further comment.

I'd go with topic over discipline. I'm honestly not sure about the holistically thing - I don't know enough to comment.

But it's definitely "its" not "it's."

I don't think you need to put "Law and Economics" in quotes each time, and I'm not sure that Law should be capitalized, but those are style things, and the style you are using is different than mine.

Good luck!
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Thank you very much, but i couldn't really understand if the letter is strong, and i dont mean grammar or structure, but does it do a "good job" of explaining why I am interested in Law & Economics in general, and in this program in particular?
Johnny_zbut does it do a "good job" of explaining why I am interested in Law & Economics in general, and in this program in particular?
from my point.....definitely
Please Help me with my motivation letter.

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Milan

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