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Question:

Some people prefer to get up early in the morning and start the day's work.
Others prefer to get up later in the day and work until late at night.
Which do yu prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.

Answer:

Many of us will say get up early in the morning is good to health. But we could count
the followers who really practice in their life. One group will say get up early in the morning
and start the day's work is really good. While the other group will follow get up later and work until late at night.
I believe there are stronger reasons for get up early in the morning and start the day's work.

Well, If we get up early in the morning we could realize the lot of changes in our life.
We could do more works if we get up early than to get up late and do work till at night. Since in the night
automatically we feel tiredness. This is not only because of our work. The main reason for this is due to scarcity of
oxygen in night time. Moreover in dawn time we could breeze fresh air. More energetic rays from the sun, will give
us more energy.

The most imporatnt thing if we get up early in the morning is we could plan our day's work
in effective way since we have enough time. There is no need to plan any work in our busy day time.
As a student one would be punctual to their school and would be always brisk in whole day class. As a businees
person one could plan in well executive way. Moreover we have lot of time for our health to be improved by undergoing
Yoga classes, medidation, jogging, swimming etc. This will enable us to be more active in our day time.

I will give best example what I faced in my life. During my graduation tenure, I was so lazy in the initial days.
I won't care about my day work. I used to think like I will do it later. Mean time I will do study late night, but I could not study
at night due to drousy. But it started to affect my studies and I saw the result of my laziness in my exam results.
My friend suggested to get up early. Though it was difficult to me initially, I practiced myself because my passion my studies
impetus me. I started to get up early in morning. And I started to do yoga. I feel the day is really gift to me. I studied in the morning.
All this effort made me to achieve university rank in my post graduation.

To sum up, the best way to success in our life, we should be a regular and active person all through the day.
To achieve this goal we have to get up early in the morning. Finally I would like to say get up early in the morning
would help us to learn and earn more in the day.
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samundeeswari.m.bMany of us will say get up early in the morning is good to health. But we could count
the followers who really practice that in their life. One group will say get up early in the morning
and start the day's work is really good. While the other group
Others will follow get up later and work until late at night.
I believe there are stronger reasons for get up early in the morning and start the day's work.

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Nowadays, Food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live? Reasons and examples.

Today, food has become easier to prepare since the advanced technology introduced a variety of cooking devices. In my opinion, this change has led to some major improvements of our lives, that is to say, cheaper and available food, diversified food, along with the increase in the number of working women.

The first two obvious impacts are the reduced price as well as the availability of the food. This is because of the little effort to prepare food and the increased amount of food in a certain period of time thanks to higher technology. Additionally, fast food and convenient food prepared quickly and easily are sold popularly at many places. Take the case of preparing a cup of fruit juice as an example. Using an automatic juicer instead of squeezing fruit traditionally is really easy and time-saving for the cooks.

Second, this leads to the appearing of a range of diversified food prepared by restaurants. Experimenting new recipes combining various ingredients is considered the best way for many restaurants to attract customers and gain profits. For example, Pho, one of Vietnam's traditional specialties, has varied kinds such as Chicken-based Pho, Beef Pho, Buddhist vegetarian Pho, and Seafood-based Pho.

Third, a positive social impact resulting from this change is that people, especially Asian women can lessen the heavy domestic housework, and increased their opportunities of participation in social activities. Today, a woman can manage successfully to combine family life with her career. Thanks to the development of technology and the convenient food, they spend less time preparing a family dinner.

In conclusion, the easier food preparation affects positively the way of people live. People today enjoy cheaper and available food as well as a variety of diversified food, and women have more time to join social activities. Thus, this change brings not only economic benefits, but also a social improvement in daily lives.
Nowadays, Food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live? Reasons and examples.

Today, food has become easier to prepare since the advanced technology introduced a variety of cooking devices. In my opinion, this change has led to some major improvements of our lives, that is to say, cheaper and available food, more diversified food sources, along with the increase in the number of working women.

The first two obvious impacts are the reduced prices as well as the availability of the food. This is because of the little effort to prepare food and the increased amount of food in a certain period of time thanks to higher modern technology. Additionally, fast food and convenient food prepared quickly and easily are sold popularly at many places. Take the case of preparing a cup of fruit juice as an example. Using an automatic juicer instead of squeezing fruit traditionally is really easy and time-saving for the cooks.

Second, this (what is this?) leads to the appearing of a range of diversified food prepared by restaurants. Coming up with new recipes combining various ingredients is considered the best way for many restaurants to attract customers and gain profits. For example, Pho, one of Vietnam's traditional specialties, has varied kinds such as Chicken-based Pho, Beef Pho, Buddhist vegetarian Pho, and Seafood-based Pho.

Third, a positive social impact resulting from this change is that people, especially Asian women do not have to do as much domestic housework, and increased their opportunities of participation in social activities. Today, a woman can manage successfully to combine family life with her career. Thanks to the development of technology and the convenient food sources, they spend less time preparing a family dinner (just one?).

In conclusion, the easier food preparation affects positively the way of people live. People today enjoy cheaper and available food as well as a variety of diversified food, and women have more time to join social activities. Thus, this change brings not only economic benefits, but also a social improvement in daily lives.